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haiku 13

a blue to black sky
hangs over the brittle woods --
single panes shatter


* haiku untitled with traditional objective view/image
no judgement given, a simple as porridge glimpse
of season [brittle woods- kigo for fall] 
two parts structure with a kire-ji is a cutting word
[woods--] that indicates a transition or "thought-pause"
from landscape to home using SOUND in the fragmented
phrase as the second part, the sensory input...
I used 5-7-5 but, it is unnecessary, less than 17 is fine.

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  1. Date: 11/10/2012 6:21:00 PM

    Lady, :-) CONGRATULATIONS!!! Enjoyed stopping by to read all the hurricane haiku... every winner on this list had a mind blowing image... take care~ Always* PD

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 10:37:00 AM

    Congrats Debi on your win!

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 8:20:00 AM

    This piece and the explanation underneath is perfect. The way you explained the cutting word, that ties it all in has been helpful. I welcome your knowledge any DAY!!!...Thanks!

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 7:35:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in the Hurricane Haiku contest Debbie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 2:38:00 AM

    I can hear your panes clatter. Fantastic Haiku. Congrats on your win. Greetings from the Netherlands. Ellie Daphne

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 1:40:00 AM

    Congratulations on your winning poem in Hurricanes contest, well done!! oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 1:24:00 AM

    Congratulations on you well deserved win Debbie and thanks for your lovely comment on poor Old George xx

  1. Date: 11/9/2012 12:00:00 AM

    congratulations to you, Debs, and thanks so much for my placement in your trinity contest Thanks for the inspiration.

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 11:29:00 PM

    CONGRATS DEBBIE ON A GRAND WIN FOR A PERFECT DEPICTION OF HURRICANE LUV .. GREAT IMAGERY AS ALWAYS LUV ..

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 11:14:00 PM

    Debbie, A real haiku ! Congrats on your win in Sandy’s contest!

  1. Date: 11/8/2012 8:00:00 PM

    thank you' san

  1. Date: 11/7/2012 3:56:00 PM

    Nicely done, Debs, and it's kind of fun to see you doing with syllable count!

  1. Date: 11/7/2012 7:51:00 AM

    And yep that's a great haiku my sweet haiku tutor.My hands are full lately with baby Christina ma..that's why i haven't been on the soup very much.Hope you are doing fine dear..i thought about you and my fellow friends when i heard about 'Hurricaine mean Sandy' :)

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 1:28:00 PM

    wonderful haiku, Deb. and Thanks for the little lesson! hugs, catie :)

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 1:21:00 PM

    Okay cher...final version posted and entered...gotta' stick with it! - Tim

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 11:19:00 AM

    Love the word brittle, cool that it is kigo, but it is the imagery that caught my attention. I sent you a soup, I think, but I was so tired, I'm not sure if I checked it actually was sent (damn captchas) There is a sonnet I'd like you to read. :) Written with love, Dee

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 10:47:00 AM

    Like it, well done Debbie. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 9:36:00 AM

    Yep...just caught it in the second line...no personification!!...'pushing tide to untold heights?'...'a fatal wall of water?'...'thirty foot wall of water?'

    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson Date: 11/6/2012 9:50:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    'legendary tidal surge?'
  1. Date: 11/6/2012 8:48:00 AM

    Soupy mail!...

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 8:15:00 AM

    Dear Light and LOVE Debbie, HOPE this finds YOU and YOURS Healthy and High in the Spirit. Superb Haiku thanks for the info. I did see the BlueSpruce"Break dancing in 60+ mile an hour winds. LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...HG

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 6:54:00 AM

    Now THAT'S a Haiku!...I knew the one I entered for Sandy's contest was not a true Haiku...but I've heard there are different 'modern' ones now?...Maybe I'm wrong...anyway, I took it out of the contest and labeled it a senryu...have since posted another (Camille)...check it out and critique it okay? - Tim

  1. Date: 11/6/2012 3:13:00 AM

    Lovely haiku Debbie!

  1. Date: 11/5/2012 3:58:00 PM

    awesome Haiku Debbie!

  1. Date: 11/4/2012 7:41:00 PM

    Good one!!

  1. Date: 11/4/2012 12:56:00 PM

    lovely haiku, Debs. Carolyn mentioned your cat - I hope all turned out well