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A Creepy Feeling

Have you ever been hiking Out in the woods When this creepy feeling Scares you real good? Afraid to look round Don't know what's behind Oh don't be so silly! Everything's fine! The sound of a twig Snapping in two Your heart starts pounding You shake in your shoes A flicker of light Through the towering pines Saw something move Was it just in my mind? It happens again So I whirl myself 'round There right before me My brother the clown Laughing and chuckling Under the pines This badass prankster Kid brother of mine He teases me still Bout the look on my face After all these years He still can't erase One day my turn For revenge will arrive And brother oh brother I hope he survives! © Jack Ellison 2012

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  1. Date: 11/7/2012 10:57:00 AM

    Ha ha I know that feeling. I have 4 brothers who still like to wind me up. Good read, made me laugh :)

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 11/7/2012 1:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    All brothers do this kind of stuff... it's their job! LOL Thanks for dropping by, Miss Sarah! Hugs, Jack xox
  1. Date: 10/24/2012 12:19:00 AM

    Revenge costs too much - I enjoy witnessing unequivocal karma - J.A.B. %

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/24/2012 4:59:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    LOL! I still say revenge is SWEET at any cost! Cheers!
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 7:56:00 PM

    Hi Jack,,,i'm not hiking anytime soon.... the ending of your poem is interesting.... enjoyed...pd

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/24/2012 4:58:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Especially as Halloween draws near! LOL Those ghoulies will be out in full force! LOL HUgs, Jack xxx
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 8:46:00 AM

    you have to look out for those big foot fellows Jack, they're worst than our, pixies and fairies, i bet your brother will find out, when you are in a mind...good poem,

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/23/2012 10:07:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Harry for dropping by my friend! Have a great day!
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 8:35:00 AM

    Love this poem Jack, what brothers do to scare each other. Nice write. Hugs, Gail

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/23/2012 8:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    That's what brothers are for isn't it! LOL Thanks my dear Gail... big hugs, Jack xxx
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 8:00:00 AM

    What no romance? I was getting good at those comments... Heavy sigh... If your brothers getting older don't scare him too much... You might send him to the happy hunting ground. Tremendous Halloween poem... Not too edgy... just right... PS I left you another comment on A Kiss...

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/23/2012 8:14:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Aha... but you didn't hear the rest of my story! Later met up with this gorgeous blonde...
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 7:25:00 AM

    Yes, and this Halloween's the perfect time to get him back! Can I be there to watch, record, then post on facebook, youtube and instagram? Haha

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/23/2012 7:29:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Absolutely... I'll leave the light on for ya! LOL
  1. Date: 10/23/2012 6:46:00 AM

    Beautiful poem. Love it. It's so picturesque. I immediately remembered my hiking in the wood. Best wishes, Larisa

    Ellison Avatar Jack Ellison Date: 10/23/2012 7:11:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Glad I could remind you of your walks in the woods, Larisa! Hugs, Jack