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The Long Drop


Where were you? on that roller coaster night of youth
When I abseiled through my dreams. Hurtling down a 
Vortex, as stars raced along, stopped and stared then sped on to
                                                                          Galaxies new.

Where were you? When that black hole pulled my emotions inside
Out, twisted my mind until tears of blood floated in a black veil.
From the nadir of desperation to a zenith of hope. Eyes filled with
                                                                         A nebula of love.

Where were you? As the trees started to die and life turned bittersweet
Enveloping me in a sheet of pearlescent skin reflecting a feeling of despair.
The highs and lows are just steps of a long staircase called life! Escher 
                                                                             Couldn‘t die!

Finally you are here! To share these journeys, these emotions. To fall with me,
Never to be caught. Spiralling through life, bouncing off my east, your west.
A damaged mind hurts, love hurts, pain hurts, life hurts…the long drop has
                                                                                Become a short step.

2/10/2012

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  1. Date: 11/22/2012 8:34:00 AM

    coming back to this super fine poem of yours, DAvid, to say HELLO and even though it's not thanksgiving there for you guys, I wish you a happy day. You are one awesome guy! hope all is going well for your wife too. LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 10/13/2012 4:14:00 AM

    so emotional...I can feel it in my heart...beautifully written poem friend David...thank you so much for sharing..hugs **Maria**

  1. Date: 10/11/2012 7:45:00 PM

    This leaves me breathless David what a trip to share, emotional and full of the unexpected. I sure enjoyed the adventure!

  1. Date: 10/11/2012 9:16:00 AM

    Goosebumps! This is one heck of a write, David. Going on my fav list. Love, Su

  1. Date: 10/11/2012 9:10:00 AM

    A long drop of tear falls down my face for you. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 10/11/2012 2:19:00 AM

    emotions turn and twist, may love remain, just be another poem to make your list, and better still from ye... good one mate!

  1. Date: 10/10/2012 6:31:00 PM

    You write with such ease and emotion..it's an amazing ride everytime I read one of your works. Thanks for commeting on mine, too...Holly

  1. Date: 10/9/2012 12:41:00 PM

    You certainly make the reader (me at least) feel your words... very nice... splendid... Terry

  1. Date: 10/9/2012 11:47:00 AM

    Lovely touching write David with well expressed emotions..

  1. Date: 10/8/2012 9:02:00 AM

    nicely written David....

  1. Date: 10/7/2012 10:49:00 AM

    Such a pleasure to be reading you today my friend. Thanks for the soup mail. And my prayers still are said for you and your wife. Michael

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 11:20:00 PM

    Just beautiful David! You've brought out the emotions splendidly!

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 10:01:00 PM

    A very interesting write. Keep writing, Jancarl

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 4:55:00 PM

    i feel the pain, been near insane, and fell with a great bloody flop, your words are great , good ol mate, don't let em ever stop...

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 10:59:00 AM

    Hi David! First of all I would like to say that it is great seeing you back here on the Soup,and to see that your poetic pen still does its magic.Secondly,wow! this is one roller coaster riding gem you`ve posted here!Deep,touching and a splendid poem.Love the imagery you`re using here,indeed a wild ride! Have a peaceful and blessed weekend my friend.Love and warm thoughts to your family!

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 8:42:00 AM

    HOW WONDERFUL TO HAVE U BACK DAVID AS I AM MESMERIZED BY THESE DRAMATIC LINES SO BRILLIANTLY WRITTEN LUV .. HOPE ALL THINGS THAT KEPT U FROM US HAVE NOW RESOLVED LUV ..

  1. Date: 10/6/2012 1:15:00 AM

    Good morning David...have a lovely weekend..

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 10:22:00 PM

    this is like a masterpiece of yours, David. I expected to see a comment of mine already under it, but I think I has seen it before at PFT. Absolutely wonderful piece.

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 8:54:00 PM

    Hi David, how are you?? I can not say much for me,,, but HI... TEX

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 7:28:00 PM

    An excellent write full of emotions David!Love it very much.

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 6:31:00 PM

    I love this wild ride - love, death, hope, twists and turns. Almost enough to make me dizzy.

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 5:09:00 PM

    O, the beauty of pain and the celebration of the reprieve from its hurt and very correctly free verse, what a wonderful combination. Glad to hear that times have changed for the better.My prayers are still with you and your family, peace and blessings!! Jagath

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 4:42:00 PM

    love this Sandy

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 11:46:00 AM

    suddenly, i am at a loss for words, david... touched and pierced!... clappies for you!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 10/4/2012 6:24:00 PM

    Oh my there is nothing to say but OH MY a fav! and WOW [Did I say wow?] Light & Love

  1. Date: 10/3/2012 8:02:00 AM

    To be with the one you love, through life, cushions it the blows! Well scripted verse! Fulfilling journey

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 9:45:00 PM

    Professional vocab. David - a very Cabbalistic piece my friend - stairways go up and down and winds blow from west to east - you've got some real mature metaphors here, and mature message too! the highs & lows are often exquisite opportunities, and you found something to share them with, awesome - J.A.B. %

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 8:03:00 PM

    DAVID, TRULY A NICE POEM TO ENJOY... I love the cosmos image you give here. You have your pair,,worth the wait... step by step, it all takes time...xox~ TEX

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 7:19:00 PM

    They don't make people like you anymore David...and this poem is so breathtakingly beautiful..I can't even begin to explain how much it touched my heart..so very good to hear from you..glad to know things are going well...Yasmin.

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 6:54:00 PM

    Ahhh David!... What a gem! I was riding that roller coaster and spiralling and bouncing right along with you! Yep...it sure hurts, but ain't it SO fine? Pain teaches...Welcome back!...regards and healing wishes to your wife - Tim

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