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The victim

                                           He was her friend.
                                         Her close companion.
                               Then came the turbulent emotions
                                       causing a blur of motion.
                                    Ruthlessly battering borders
                                 Shattering all interfering barriers.
                              In shock of the unspeakable betrayal
                             she stood rooted in a capitulate state –
                                       a chick with the hawk.
                              Psychologically bruised into resignation
                                  Awakening to the reality with a
                                          deep hatred of self.
                              Creating a post conceived abhorrence
                                      of that day when she was
                                    brutalized by circumstances.

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  1. Date: 11/6/2012 9:04:00 AM

    I'm all about poems that express raw emotion, I love this. The phrase psychologically bruised– that is perfectly worded. Brutalized by circumstances is a good way to end this poem. I love the use of imagery to portray such raw emotion, this is marvelous!

  1. Date: 10/10/2012 10:05:00 PM

    Well done Vicky, very good poem.

  1. Date: 10/10/2012 10:17:00 AM

    i like your usage of words. very well done.

  1. Date: 9/17/2012 4:33:00 AM

    This is very moving and real. To be left with self-hatred after something so awful happens. If this autobiographical I certainly hope you have moved on, into a sense of peace and love. Wonderful job.

  1. Date: 9/15/2012 11:02:00 PM

    Vicky,, Congratulations in Debbie's " Let's Get Serious " awesome contest. ~ :-) always a pleasure in reading all winners when I get the chance. super xox's from~ PD

  1. Date: 9/13/2012 7:15:00 PM

    Very sad, it must be difficult to write a poem like this , warm thoughts, Ralph

  1. Date: 9/10/2012 6:34:00 AM

    Congratulations on your super win in this contest "Let's Get Serious" Vicky. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 9/9/2012 2:32:00 PM

    No one likes to assume the worst about someone..and being hurt by a person called friend is the worst! I hope you are OK? Congrad's on your Serious verse winning. Light & Love

  1. Date: 9/9/2012 9:07:00 AM

    Congratulations on your big win Vicky xx

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 11:45:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win with this very powerful poetry , vicky

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 9:19:00 PM

    Very sad poem. Congratulations on your win. Well done Lee

  1. Date: 9/8/2012 6:10:00 PM

    A sad state to be in. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 9/7/2012 7:35:00 AM

    Wow Vicky this is powerful, so full of emotion, 'A Chick with the Hawk' i'm going to place this in my favourite poems alomng with you. awesome just awesome.

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  1. Date: 9/5/2012 4:46:00 PM

    Awww wow! This was great.. . Very dark and so true. I feel bad for those who ar scarred by the cruelty of man and such things. Great poem!!! Always, Laura

  1. Date: 9/5/2012 9:36:00 AM

    Oooo... powerful poem! Terry (& thanks for your kind comments)

  1. Date: 9/5/2012 2:58:00 AM

    Vicky, a very good poem. - Oxox love Anne-Lise :)