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The Dusk is Tricking Us Again

Whenever the sun goes home to sleep,
Man says 'today's labor is over'.
But I know the dusk is tricking us again.
Yet, who cares to give that trick a thought.


Man says 'today's labor is over;
A dreamy sleep is the only thing to reap'
But I know the dawn will soon rob me of my rest'
Yet, the weary man gives dusk trick no thought.


A dreamy sleep is the only thing to reap
After man has given the day his labor
But I know the dawn will soon rob me of my rest
For the dusk only trick us to look forward to its rest.


After man has given the day his labor,
I know the dusk will trick us again.
For it makes man look forward to its rest,
Whenever the sun goes home to sleep




11th August, '12
Just experimenting with the Pantoum form

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  1. Date: 8/24/2012 8:22:00 PM

    hmmm, I was trying to find your lines that are supposed to match up from stanza to stanza. The theme of your poem is very interesting but I am sensing it is not quite a pantoum poem. They can be so difficult to do!! Keep working!!

  1. Date: 8/24/2012 7:54:00 AM

    It's a tough form... very nice though...Terry