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The Proposal


The shy day eased in, nerves ran a mock.
The shy voice practised the words, quietly
Would it be on one knee, or in bed?

This is forever, not just weekdays or weekends
It isn’t a sandwich, it’s the whole loaf!
All or nothing, or nothing at all.

The ring…this ring, I am about to give to you
Is not a piece of bling, it is a part of me,
It is a segment of life, a helix of love.

I am prepared for you to say ‘no’
I am not prepared for you to not want me
I need you to want me, I need you to say…I do! 
The pressure is on, I can feel the heat...

© 30/7/2012

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  1. Date: 8/16/2012 6:04:00 PM

    Not a pice of bling...represents SO much more! Lovely poem and sentiment David...it really is :-)

  1. Date: 8/8/2012 5:20:00 PM

    This is great! keep it up Dav. kingfemi.

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 8:59:00 PM

    Well deserved win David. Lee

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 12:57:00 PM

    Oh yes,David..the heat is on:) A big congrats on a well deserved win too my friend.Have a great Sunday across the North Sea my friend..Arild

  1. Date: 8/5/2012 11:15:00 AM

    Tremendous feeling came out from last two lines. Oh! so sweet. Loved always, bl

  1. Date: 8/4/2012 10:24:00 PM

    I like it... A lot!! Good Poem. Congrats.

  1. Date: 8/3/2012 1:05:00 PM

    She will say "Yes" (^_^) I like it..thanks for sharing "Maria"

  1. Date: 8/2/2012 4:28:00 PM

    Congrats David on your win from what I see by reading the other comments...I like this poem a lot..seems as if all men go through this stage.

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 11:49:00 PM

    Congratulations on your deserved win,David!

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 7:20:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win in Debbie''s "Heat" contest David. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 4:41:00 PM

    congratulations David on a wonderfully roamantic,wow what a proposal!

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 11:37:00 AM

    Stressful in a beautiful way..thank you for sharing this moment! and thank you for your comment on my poem! Am sure she says a BIG YES!! Much love and light to both of you!

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 9:03:00 AM

    Congratulations David; sounds like a stressful situation! The uncertainty will end when she finally says "I do!". Then you will have pages and volumes more to write. Great verse! Best wishes, Mikki

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 6:38:00 AM

    Excellent and wonderful write,David."A helix of love".I love this. Congratulations on your win.kudos to you,pal.

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 5:45:00 AM

    :) Such a lovely romantic way to feel the heat. Congrats, so enjoyed the read.

  1. Date: 7/31/2012 7:10:00 AM

    David, guess what? I got a proposal from that publisher in Dublin! Now all I have to do is learn how to cut and paste.... Wish me luck.... Jean

    Williams Avatar David Williams Date: 7/31/2012 7:32:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Jean ha ha, good luck, xx
  1. Date: 7/30/2012 10:15:00 PM

    Great !!!! A unique proposal, my friend!! I really like the play on words...very nice! Ruben.

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 6:27:00 PM

    I am currently searching for my woman,this poem is driving me on! Nice artistic honesty David - J.A.B.

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 4:20:00 PM

    Yes I do, now can I have the bling bling? You charm me David Williams, have a nice evening, hugs vie

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 4:13:00 PM

    the words we say will be ok, when it's eyes do glisten time.... great poem mate...

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 3:59:00 PM

    OMG!! Are you serious?? Congratulations big boy!! hope the answer is Yes! Yes! Yes! Jean

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 2:45:00 PM

    oh, I have seen this clever one already today. VERY cute, DAvid!

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 1:48:00 PM

    What a great mix of twists you threw out at us David! I really enjoyed the delightful way you approached this piece my friend! A dynamic flow of yes and no segment possibilities! Wondrous write! Great Work!!

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 1:24:00 PM

    Ok if I must, I do xx ha ha btw like it .

    Williams Avatar David Williams Date: 7/30/2012 1:29:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ha,ha at least I would get to go this party....