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Terrestrial Truth -

Do men immortal know
whence went the crow,
on it's jubilant journey to bestow
the rod,the wreath, and mistletoe,

for below,
in the shadow of the pyramid
I crossed the river of Life,
my God as thy wife
my fear as my strife,

for I saw in the sun,
that Life itself is pitiless perfection -

J.A.B.

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  1. Date: 8/21/2012 10:23:00 PM

    Brilliant. That is all. ^^ Always, Laura

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 8/23/2012 4:49:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    only as brilliant as the people who can understand the voyage Laura -thank you my friend - J.A.B. ^^^
  1. Date: 8/10/2012 9:34:00 PM

    The test ..to find whether your mission on Earth is finished: if you're alive, it isn't. "I crossed the river of Life, my God as thy wife my fear as my strife" The wisdom... of a learned one

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 8/23/2012 4:46:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Life and Providence has been patient with me Anne, and perhaps I have risen to the challenge successfully, to date - I am humbled by your statement - I cound't agree more, and I am alive and ecstatic! J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/28/2012 1:27:00 PM

    This is pure poetic artistry, my friend. Exceptional imagery, rhyming and content. 'Terrestrial Truth,' (excellent title!) '...jubilant journey'and '...pitiless perfection' are cool alliterative phrases. BRAVO Justin!! Best wishes, Keith

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/30/2012 6:04:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I get excited about alliteration too Keith; cadence assists poetry to transform into music - I thank you very much for caring Keith - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/24/2012 8:03:00 PM

    Justin, wow... what a covenant sprung from the sun... this is a wonderful epic poem, of truth.. thank you for sharing...pd

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/26/2012 10:43:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I know not the words to the Covenant PD.,however,my heart bursts with purpose - thank you for helping me to see PD. J.A.B. %
  1. Date: 7/24/2012 6:01:00 PM

    that is one GREAT line: Life as pitiless perfection. I really like that!! The title using the word Terrestrial is awesome too. I don't see that word bandied about very often!

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/26/2012 10:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I'm trying to remember Andrea,trying so hard - you are great in soul & quill - thanks - J.A.B
  1. Date: 7/24/2012 12:13:00 PM

    Well written Justin, strong and beautiful - good rhyme. - oxox hugs Anne-Lise

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/26/2012 10:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Your acknowledgement makes me more happy Anne - sometimes thats all Life needs to be - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/23/2012 6:18:00 PM

    interesting read,,,,, I like it ,,,,, blessings to ya ;}

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/23/2012 10:20:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It is very important to me that we can share our visions,our growth together Debbie -thanks for your time - anticipating fine work from you - J.A.B.
  1. Date: 7/23/2012 7:14:00 AM

    Powerful imagery with metaphor happening here, Justin..."the rod, the wreath, and mistletoe". Symbols (oh I know you love them:)...God, death, love and salvation? A journey where one may find its true meaning. Best wishes! Mikki

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/23/2012 10:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    So very gratifying that a long time veteran of the craft finds enduring value in my work;in many ways we write for each other- Mikki, you are on the right path -thanks so much for the erudite analysis-J.A.B. %
  1. Date: 7/23/2012 1:28:00 AM

    life after death???who knows,this is very deep one you have written Justin,yes life pitiless perfection,this is a very intellectual philosophical ddelight and I want to thank you for visiting my page,otherwise I would end up missing this.

    Bordner Avatar Justin Bordner Date: 7/23/2012 10:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    The pleasure is all mine Yasmin -I can learn from you -I do not believe in imperfection,Life is too good for that regardless of all the inscrutable schemes & sufferings - J.A.B.