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Red-ready

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Red-ready

I’ve hidden behind dumpsters, in alleys,
And under the schoolhouse steps 
But Mr. Ted always finds me
And puts his hands up my dress,
While squeeze-squeezing my breasts

I would tell, but I want to live
And I’m afraid Sue Ellen’s dead
He used to give her his “gift”
Before he took me instead
And made me lick-lick his head

As I get older I’m pushing blades
Into my scarred up wrist
Somehow it makes the reality fade -
Cleanse- cleansing the dirtiness
Of his eyes, his words, his fists…

With a little more bleeding, I could be free
And sailing towards the sky
Never to see or feel his need
Poke-poking me against my thigh -
Thighs of steel are a lie

Would anyone miss me if I died?
Would anyone care besides Ted?
Would Mommy finally acknowledge the lies
Bleed-bleeding the water bright red? 
Or would she again, bury her head?  


7/19/12

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  1. Date: 2/26/2013 3:56:00 PM

    A very emotional write and well deserved win.

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 2:50:00 PM

    Congrats on your win Susan, hard to believe things like this happen but it is the unacceptable world today, so sad, don't we all wish we could save everyone from this abuse, much love to ya, debra

  1. Date: 2/26/2013 10:46:00 AM

    Many congratulations on your win poppet xx

  1. Date: 2/25/2013 5:23:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win. Well deserved. Connie

  1. Date: 2/25/2013 7:55:00 AM

    So sad and powerful Susan!

  1. Date: 2/25/2013 7:15:00 AM

    Full of pain....a great poem...congrats on the win!

  1. Date: 2/25/2013 5:51:00 AM

    Congratulations! :)

  1. Date: 2/24/2013 9:49:00 PM

    Hi Susan, ... congratulations with your awesome deep and darken poem* GOODNIGHT!!! xox~LINDA

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 9:46:00 AM

    Holy, man, Susan, I am so sorry I took so long to get here. Hun, you gutted me. This is art in every sense of the word. This has the quality of Sylvia Plath. I'm not crappin' ya. The repetition gives it the blade thrust, the childish sing-song mingling with the horrid reality. I'll be posting my blog tonight, soup newsletter, about poems that Kill us softly. I could have used yours as a prime example. Gold worthy. If you had put it into my contest, I would have caused grumbles by placing it high

  1. Date: 8/2/2012 3:47:00 AM

    A powerful write Susan, too sad nonetheless. Its tragic such a thing should happen. Thank you for your sweet words on my page.

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 11:41:00 PM

    It was very nice to see you stop by my poem..now go and stop by my messenger... and yes...I would miss you...I miss you already... your poem cuts real deep my friend SUSAN... wait wait... can i poke you with a stick if you die...lol...sorry i just had too add a little bit of humor... love your poem...pd

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 4:49:00 PM

    Susan, I know you like that red for the title. but I still think something else would be better. Maybe just simply "bleeding" or "Bleed Bleeding" Since she is bleeding emotionally as well as physically. WOuld Ted be like a stepdad or something. I don't remember when I first saw this that you mentioned a sue ellen having disappeared. Sounds so ominous!

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 3:59:00 PM

    Give me his Adress and he won't do that again. Ever

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 3:57:00 PM

    Wow I read this twice and it makes me angry that this happens. No punishment is enough. Powerful write my dear sweet Susan. Hugs in the nice way always Michael

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 2:36:00 PM

    Sad that this sort of thing happens around the world and goes unreported and continues going on..I am glad that you chose this topic..Great idea and presentation..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 1:25:00 PM

    Unfortunately, this is an all too common happstance. Gripping words! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 9:16:00 AM

    p.s. sorry but I don't like the title, to me it sounds like your are 'ready ' to accept it, twisted bastard is what I would have called it...fight back with words that is your sword....

    Susan Avatar Black Eyed Susan Date: 8/1/2012 9:42:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I just changed it to red-ready, but I don't think it's any better. back to the drawing board. sigh...
  1. Date: 8/1/2012 9:13:00 AM

    Susan this is some write, I hope like my 'proposal' it's fiction, I would certainly miss your writing, thanks for your comments on text speak if you haven't already could you check my blog and let us know if you would do poem for my contest and yes it would be humourous..David

  1. Date: 8/1/2012 8:46:00 AM

    Serious, but acceptable.

  1. Date: 7/31/2012 8:53:00 AM

    another powerful and dramatic piece Susan..great visuals too.. thankxx so much for my win in your contest WAIT..I so enjoy the challenges u offer luv.. and am honored to be chosen for my poetry with so many amazing winners.. thankxxx again ..

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 4:40:00 PM

    This is a powerful write Susan ...poignant... and with a raw truth that cuts to the nerve....blessings ...Joseph

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 4:33:00 PM

    Thank you so much for my first place win in your contest Susan ....I am over the moon with this one...love ..Joseph

  1. Date: 7/27/2012 11:51:00 AM

    susan, wow, this is a powerful poem. It makes me wonder sometimes why you always like to write these kinds of poems about the worst in society, for I know you have a very nice life. But someone needs to tell the horrors of the world and you do it so well. Very nicely crafted poem. I got your title's meaning but I was colored by your hints at the bottom. So maybe I would not have gotten it on my own. Unless the girl's name is also Reddy, I would call it something else. Luv, Andrea

  1. Date: 7/22/2012 9:18:00 AM

    Susan - The height of despair is what is written here. The first and last stanzas are heart wrenching. Such a hard-hitting piece - you've written it so well. Frankly, I didn't get the title; I thought of Helen Reddy the singer. I don't know what title could prepare the reading for what's to come. Great great poem. love, Kathy

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 11:10:00 AM

    .....wooow.....there is always someone who loves you and will miss you. - Very well written B.E.S. - Have a lovely weekend. - oxox Anne-Lise

  1. Date: 7/21/2012 10:29:00 AM

    Wow, chilling piece, Susan. Thanks - really loved the contest : )