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CASTLE OF SAND

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CASTLE OF SAND

A dream vacation, time alone,
One boat ride to isolation,
Solace Island, my stress free zone, 
A week of true relaxation.
I’m left on a long beach of white,
But a morning haze clouds the sight.
All is still, save the turquoise sea,
Someone has left a gift for me,
A long gone child, summer’s artist,
Has bequeathed a shy fantasy...
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  

Here there’ll be no T.V. or phone,
I’m far from civilization,
The cabin’s old but has good bones,
and set in a prime location.
Time ticks on, the tide brings its bite,
While I walk the shore, welcome night,
Waves swallow turrets, so cruelly,
And walls crumble, become debris, 
As the sun sets, I can not resist
sighing for its untold story...
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  

Dawn arrives and the seagulls drone,
I dress with much jubilation, 
My camera says do not postpone
Rising – now- to the occasion.
Oh, this place casts its sweet invite
with tender breeze and foggy light, 
The plan’s to capture all I see
of this nature sanctuary.
I step outside and my head twists,
It yet stands, whole, destruction free... 
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  

I kneel before its abalone
path and sea glass decoration,
small handprints on a wee throne 
tell me of a coronation.
Fine grains wink as the day turns bright,
The tale does not end, but rewrites
its pretty mote and towers three
and slowly builds a mystery
that won’t easily be dismissed,
Murmuring of veiled company...
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  

I was completely on my own,
And ruled by imagination,
But for seven days I was shown
an innocent re-creation.
I heard giggles, their source unknown,
And the cabin door was impolite,
Opening in the dead of night.
Shells would be arranged, carefully,
As though for a doll’s tea party.
I called out, please, let me assist,
But my isle mate hid so bashfully...
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  

I went home to normalcy,
Researched Solace’s history,
A young girl had drowned, ocean kissed,
And there she plays, eternally...
Castle of sand lost in the mist.  





For Gail's Sandcastle Contest
By Cyndi MacMillan, May 14, 2012

*Solely a work of imagination. There is no Solace Island, but islands are available to rent. 

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  1. Date: 5/19/2012 2:53:00 AM
    Congratulations on your wonderful win! Loved the story :)

  1. Date: 5/19/2012 12:32:00 AM
    I agree with the others. You deserve a 1st prize because you have told a wonderful story in metered poetry, which is difficult as I know. I really loved your poem Cyndi.

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 6:07:00 PM
    I love it when my fav's win!!:) lol...Congratulations on your win Cyndi!! big hugs,love ya deb

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 5:28:00 PM
    Excellent story telling and use of form! Congrad's on your big win! Light & Love

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 4:18:00 PM
    Congratulations on your placement in Gail's "Sandcastles" contest Cyndi. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 3:37:00 PM
    Fantastic. You have a truly gifted way in telling a story and weaving your words into rhyme. A pleasure to read. The flow of words easily relays a story that mystifies and pleases the soul. I love poems that are easy to read and easy to understand, yet are not simple in either conept or words. You achieve that tremendously. Well done. Thanks. Joe

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 3:37:00 PM
    wonderful winner, Cyndi, congrats. harry

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 1:47:00 PM
    Amazing write that captures the imaginations and keeps it congrats Cyndi on your 1st place win, Gail must have had a hell of a time, your poem is exceptional, luv vie

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 11:19:00 AM
    Congratulations onyour win with a beautiful poem.

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 10:41:00 AM
    Congratulations Cyndi I am proud to share a spot with you xx

  1. Date: 5/18/2012 10:22:00 AM
    Cyndi congrats on your win, fab..David

  1. Date: 5/15/2012 12:55:00 AM
    beautifully written,I was transported to the beach while reading it.

  1. Date: 5/15/2012 12:55:00 AM
    beautifully written,I was transported to the beach while reading it.

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 11:21:00 PM
    Wow and double wow! What an amazing story. I was taken away to your island retreat and the twist ending is perfect. I am thoroughly entertained. You have such a gift!! Hugs, Rhonda

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 11:20:00 PM
    Wow and double wow! What an amazing story. I was taken away to your island retreat and the twist ending is perfect. I am thoroughly entertained. You have such a gift!! Hugs, Rhonda

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 3:42:00 PM
    Touched,Love

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 10:53:00 AM
    Very good work. held my attention through it's entirety..this is WORK!

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 9:47:00 AM
    cyn, i love the playful and relaxing nature of your writing here... the imagery is detailed and calming with a sudden twist in the end which blows my mind!... fine storyteller you are!.. gosh, this is a winning bet for sure!... exceptional, my dear..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 9:30:00 AM
    Wow! Cyndi, what and ending! I did not see that coming. Best wishes in the contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 5/14/2012 9:17:00 AM
    Now THIS, my dear, is "MINT"!!! publish!!!!! it's a fav!!! I love it !!! a legend! awsome awsome!! I adore the personafication of the door!! FAAABUUULLOOUUUUSSSS!!!!!! big hugs, love ya much!! deb