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The Bird and The Moon

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The Bird and The Moon

`` In the middle of a dream was I, when suddenly a sound which I thought profound, woke me up at night.. Squinting my eyes, got up to sight bluejay shrill, on my window sill; air wrapped in a fine mist, it sparkled like pearls on moon beams.. moon dust shone through the window as glistening long white trail.. Down swooped the bird, looping cold rays. I fell under magical spell; fumbled for my limbs, wibbly wobbly things; held fast on the bed, I was covered in fine silver cobwebs ... ~ For Catie Lindsey's "Diminished and Advancing Hexaverse Contest" ..

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  1. Date: 12/12/2013 5:32:00 AM
    It is excellent! Many approving smiles! Giorgio

  1. Date: 6/11/2012 5:30:00 AM
    This is great... I really enjoyed it. Nice to get such a blessing in such a beautiful monday afternoon.

  1. Date: 4/10/2012 9:14:00 AM
    HI gautami :D I really love the imagery you put in here, very enchanting!! :D Very lovely diminished hexaverse :D soupmail in a bit(e)... :D

  1. Date: 4/6/2012 1:13:00 AM
    so impressive and expressive Gautami.. oh am so honored u enjoyed my entry luv.. it is a joy to create for your contests .. wishing u easter blessings as u celebrate.. with luv..

  1. Date: 3/26/2012 11:14:00 PM
    this is SO COOL. I think Catie is going to just love it!!

  1. Date: 3/25/2012 11:52:00 AM
    Very beautiful descriptions through this awesome hexaverse, Gautami. Enjoyed the bit of humor in the last verse too. Highly creative and a sure winner! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 7:17:00 PM
    Such beautiful imagery in this poem. i felt captured watching. Good lick in the contest.

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 10:05:00 PM
    wow! beautiful poem. good luck on the contest :)

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 2:44:00 PM
    You are quite the dreamer, Gauti!...You showcase this form with grace...Blue birds are beautiful...(they do hog all the food from my birdfeeder tho-they intimidate the others..lol.) You enclosed a quaint lil story within this poem and had me on pins til the end...We should do more of these Dimin. Hexis in the future. Off to work here in a bit..I wanted to take the time to read your poetic efforts first..Have a fab rest of your day, darling. :) Gwendolen

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 2:24:00 PM
    oozing with flowing imagery, gautami... you make this form look so easy to so.. a fine fine offering.. best of luck and huggs!:)

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 1:04:00 PM
    Like the surprise ending..Very creative work indeed..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 11:14:00 AM
    Awesome, Gautami! You have described an amazing encounter. Love it! Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 9:59:00 AM
    Love it Goutami!Excellent imagery!Best wishes.

  1. Date: 3/20/2012 9:40:00 AM
    Very original write Guatami will do great in the contest. Love to you, vie