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One More Try

" ONE MORE TIME "

Stale and innocent I close my eyes.
Unpolished bones inside.
I mock my dreams, in hope I find reality.
I swim like streamers near an undying sea. 

STALE ............
INNOCENT against a stetson smell.
I CLOSE the door that circulates my emotions.
MY EYES, allergic to the the smallest particles of your  lies.
UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye.
BONES INSIDE shiver like no other.
I MOCK the same words, over and over. ((I LOVE YOU))
MY DREAMS keep me from fading. 
IN HOPES I wake up to feel more alive.
I FIND REALITY when I close my eyes.
I SWIM LIKE the open sunrise.
LIKE, the moon you come and go.
STREAMERS NEAR and far, move real slow.
AN UNDYING SEA, I just want to fall and jump right back in.

BY;PD



D.G. I HOPE I GOT YOUR CONTEST RIGHT...
IF NOT OH! WELL... AT LEAST I TRIED... 



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  1. Date: 2/3/2013 11:44:00 AM

    Linda; This is beautiful. I love you. I remember saying those words many years ago, about a thousand times. They didn't work, so I never said them again - not even to my husband. I was too afraid to say them, but almost at the end of his life I did. He had earned them. Sometimes, people are afraid to love. Thanks for sharing. Your friend Lucy

  1. Date: 12/11/2012 6:00:00 AM

    Well written! Philosophical! In no way are you a Poet Destroyer But a Poet Builder! Thank you for your comment, very kind of you.

  1. Date: 12/1/2012 4:29:00 PM

    thanks so much for waiting on me. Can't believe I did that.

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 8:27:00 PM

    This is excellently right write my dear friend, PD. I like/love every poem you write. You're really great! By the way did you read my soupmail?

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 7:48:00 PM

    I almost forgot what I like PD,I think any fairy tale is lovely ,rapunzel maybe,anything that has a nice ending PD.... let me read this... This is so good PD,you are one awesome poetess my dear... I want to read this again....

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 7:08:00 PM

    a wonderful write PD...hugs...Joseph

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 8:08:00 AM

    I know what you mean about keeping dreams alive I think I try to relive my lost dreams over and over again like reality I close my eyes hoping everything will be different when I again open them very emotional another nice read luv david scott

  1. Date: 7/1/2012 8:30:00 AM

    Now this is what I like...pure emotions from within...an excellent piece here..let me know what you placed in the contest..I know it was long ago.

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 12:32:00 PM

    God your poems are great! Can't get enough.

  1. Date: 5/30/2012 10:19:00 AM

    So sweet the line is and touched my heart and soul,...."UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye", loved always, bl

  1. Date: 5/27/2012 1:00:00 AM

    This one is quite different my friend. "MY EYES, allergic to the smallest particles of your lies. UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye." Great lines in this superb verse. Congrats on your well deserving win. Love and best wishes...Ravindra...Poet D.

  1. Date: 5/11/2012 9:15:00 PM

    Nice write

  1. Date: 5/8/2012 11:25:00 AM

    Hi PD yet another brill piece of poetry, will be back again soon

  1. Date: 4/21/2012 3:03:00 PM

    nice one sweet

  1. Date: 4/1/2012 2:27:00 PM

    WoW What a poignant piece this is. Congrats on you much deserved win. Gopd Bless, JB

  1. Date: 3/28/2012 11:51:00 AM

    Congrats on your win PD! This is such a heart wrenching write... :)

  1. Date: 3/22/2012 10:13:00 PM

    Congrats :) this was good

  1. Date: 3/21/2012 3:02:00 PM

    You did good, PD. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 3/19/2012 11:59:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Et cetera" contest P.D. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/19/2012 6:01:00 AM

    I read of this form on a poetry website the other day not knowing it was what Debs wanted for this contest..it said that this is one of the newer more difficult forms...So proud of this work of yours, PD...great job...keep shining, young lady! Love, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 6:52:00 PM

    Enter the conquering heroine! Congrad's Light & Love

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 1:04:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win PDD!fantastic poetry from you always!yeah its you!

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 12:50:00 PM

    YEAH...ME

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 7:46:00 AM

    PD, beautiful poem with such emotional thoughts! Do like Debbie says and remove the caps & it will flow to the eye much more smoothly.

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 7:34:00 AM

    Congratulations, PD, on your win in Debbie's contest! Haven't heard from you, check your soupmail. Hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 8:40:00 PM

    I told you it was a sure winner! : ) Congratulations PD! Ruben.

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 8:11:00 PM

    A good try and a great win pd. Strange how each of us did it just a bit differently.

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 6:06:00 PM

    Fine piece,PD.Congrats on your super win in this contest..I love your write esp "the unpolished beauty that can`t be seen with the naked eye..Keep flying my dear friend...you are forever cherished and loved....O.A

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 4:48:00 PM

    Irma, I had told you how much I liked this one and now I get to see it on the winners' list from Deb's contest. A Super duper congratulations to you!

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 9:39:00 PM

    I'VE READ ALOT OF YOUR WORL. I LOVE IT. THE UNPREDICTABLE IS WHAT I LIVE FOR...ONE LOVE

    ML Avatar SCRIBE ML Date: 3/15/2012 9:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    TYPO ''WORK''
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