Submit a Poem
Get Your Premium Membership
spacer
 

One More Try

Poet Destroyer A  Avatar Poet Destroyer A  - Premium MemberPremium Member Send Soup Mail Go to Poets Blog Block poet from commenting on your poetry

Below is the poem entitled One More Try which was written by poet Poet Destroyer A . Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Read Poems by Poet Destroyer A

Best Poet Destroyer A Poems

+ Fav Poet

One More Try

" ONE MORE TIME "

Stale and innocent I close my eyes.
Unpolished bones inside.
I mock my dreams, in hope I find reality.
I swim like streamers near an undying sea. 

STALE ............
INNOCENT against a stetson smell.
I CLOSE the door that circulates my emotions.
MY EYES, allergic to the the smallest particles of your  lies.
UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye.
BONES INSIDE shiver like no other.
I MOCK the same words, over and over. ((I LOVE YOU))
MY DREAMS keep me from fading. 
IN HOPES I wake up to feel more alive.
I FIND REALITY when I close my eyes.
I SWIM LIKE the open sunrise.
LIKE, the moon you come and go.
STREAMERS NEAR and far, move real slow.
AN UNDYING SEA, I just want to fall and jump right back in.

BY;PD



Post Comments

Please Login to post a comment
Next>|Last
 
  1. Date: 11/17/2013 5:17:00 PM

    Linda These words are hopeful and gives the reader a sense that dreams don't have to die. Even if they take forever to come true, never give up on them Great job Hugs Thanks for the 2nd place with my Trickery poem.

  1. Date: 5/25/2013 9:07:00 PM

    I'm finally back to reread and comment here (just done my breakfast) once again my dearest sis! Soooo lovely tip-top write as always! You're forever the best! I remember one of the piano pieces i was practicing yesterday (my piano day since we didn't have yet Sat. Class, but next wk ohhh), One More Try. Thank you so much for sharing it again! love lots 4ever, Leonora

  1. Date: 5/25/2013 7:58:00 PM

    Hi, my dearest sis! I'm still here & at the same time reading your text. My texting & internet both go quite slow..lol. I'm coming back to comment. I'll go & read more your text messages.

  1. Date: 2/3/2013 11:44:00 AM

    Linda; This is beautiful. I love you. I remember saying those words many years ago, about a thousand times. They didn't work, so I never said them again - not even to my husband. I was too afraid to say them, but almost at the end of his life I did. He had earned them. Sometimes, people are afraid to love. Thanks for sharing. Your friend Lucy

  1. Date: 12/11/2012 6:00:00 AM

    Well written! Philosophical! In no way are you a Poet Destroyer But a Poet Builder! Thank you for your comment, very kind of you.

  1. Date: 12/1/2012 4:29:00 PM

    thanks so much for waiting on me. Can't believe I did that.

  1. Date: 10/17/2012 8:27:00 PM

    This is excellently right write my dear friend, PD. I like/love every poem you write. You're really great! By the way did you read my soupmail?

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 7:08:00 PM

    a wonderful write PD...hugs...Joseph

  1. Date: 7/24/2012 8:08:00 AM

    I know what you mean about keeping dreams alive I think I try to relive my lost dreams over and over again like reality I close my eyes hoping everything will be different when I again open them very emotional another nice read luv david scott

  1. Date: 7/1/2012 8:30:00 AM

    Now this is what I like...pure emotions from within...an excellent piece here..let me know what you placed in the contest..I know it was long ago.

  1. Date: 6/2/2012 12:32:00 PM

    God your poems are great! Can't get enough.

  1. Date: 5/30/2012 10:19:00 AM

    So sweet the line is and touched my heart and soul,...."UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye", loved always, bl

  1. Date: 5/27/2012 1:00:00 AM

    This one is quite different my friend. "MY EYES, allergic to the smallest particles of your lies. UNPOLISHED beauty, that can't be seen with the naked eye." Great lines in this superb verse. Congrats on your well deserving win. Love and best wishes...Ravindra...Poet D.

  1. Date: 5/11/2012 9:15:00 PM

    Nice write

  1. Date: 5/8/2012 11:25:00 AM

    Hi PD yet another brill piece of poetry, will be back again soon

  1. Date: 4/21/2012 3:03:00 PM

    nice one sweet

  1. Date: 4/1/2012 2:27:00 PM

    WoW What a poignant piece this is. Congrats on you much deserved win. Gopd Bless, JB

  1. Date: 3/28/2012 11:51:00 AM

    Congrats on your win PD! This is such a heart wrenching write... :)

  1. Date: 3/22/2012 10:13:00 PM

    Congrats :) this was good

  1. Date: 3/21/2012 3:02:00 PM

    You did good, PD. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 3/19/2012 11:59:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's "Et cetera" contest P.D. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/19/2012 6:01:00 AM

    I read of this form on a poetry website the other day not knowing it was what Debs wanted for this contest..it said that this is one of the newer more difficult forms...So proud of this work of yours, PD...great job...keep shining, young lady! Love, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 6:52:00 PM

    Enter the conquering heroine! Congrad's Light & Love

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 12:50:00 PM

    YEAH...ME

  1. Date: 3/18/2012 7:46:00 AM

    PD, beautiful poem with such emotional thoughts! Do like Debbie says and remove the caps & it will flow to the eye much more smoothly.

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 8:11:00 PM

    A good try and a great win pd. Strange how each of us did it just a bit differently.

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 6:06:00 PM

    Fine piece,PD.Congrats on your super win in this contest..I love your write esp "the unpolished beauty that can`t be seen with the naked eye..Keep flying my dear friend...you are forever cherished and loved....O.A

  1. Date: 3/17/2012 4:48:00 PM

    Irma, I had told you how much I liked this one and now I get to see it on the winners' list from Deb's contest. A Super duper congratulations to you!

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 9:52:00 AM

    I swim like the open sunrise/like,the moon i come and go.. so beautifully penned P.D.. One for my favourites-Charma

  1. Date: 3/14/2012 10:47:00 PM

    Poets are good lovers, aren't we? hahaha! You can easily get girls with your flattering words. Am sure your girl loves you very much..leila

Next>|Last