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Passerby

Drip

Drip

Drop

Condensation song envelops this flesh
scraped by incomplete diamond cuts

Flawed

1130pm loneliness slides its fingertips against my neck

Seductive reminders of where I could be

Who I could have embraced

Had it not been for the incomplete diamond cut
AA grade dangles off edge of white gold sanity

Seclusion sucks on inclusion’s pacifier
to savor tasteless dreams, all
dried
out

All
cried
out

Her calls
died
out

Jury embraces bungeed impulse,
hung 

Pre-conceived notion written with
tarred feathers plucked from messenger’s wing.

All because
the incomplete diamond
released her grasp against my palm

After loving me enough
to let me go
during anarchy’s final tear

My last 2-ply tissue paper
sways with expired scythe on red earth

As passers-by
watch the raindrops falling on my head
falling on my head

Their verdict
decided

Raindrops
keep falling on my head

Falling on my head

Falling

Drip

Drop

©Drake J. Eszes

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  1. Date: 5/23/2013 8:03:00 AM

    Lots to ponder here. I enjoyed the diamond metaphors but found some of the transitions confusing and disconnected. I may have to come back to this one to fully appreciate it.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/23/2013 8:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yes, take your time on this one. They all connect, but on a bit of a grander scale. Because it's referencing a few point of views surrounding the character speaking these lines. The passers-by. :) Thank you for coming by here, Richard!
  1. Date: 10/17/2012 9:13:00 AM

    Lovely write Drake! Love how you've used the rain and its rhythm to articulate the emotions going on. Nice!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 10/17/2012 9:16:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi Vicky! Thank you so much! :) Sometimes it's all about the rain...
  1. Date: 3/5/2012 8:54:00 PM

    often times i think of the passers by while it rains.

  1. Date: 3/5/2012 2:30:00 AM

    Sweet - loving poem Drake - Drip, drop .. oxox Anne-Lise

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 3/5/2012 5:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    An adorable comment. Made me smile. :) Thank you so very much!
  1. Date: 2/27/2012 11:33:00 AM

    My heart dropped as reading this poem! It was great, and intense, and full passion at the same time. It makes you feel like in a tunnel, with a dark passage. Nice writing.(:

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/29/2012 9:35:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I know that feeling. :) It was great to put it into words. I really appreciate that, Cali.
  1. Date: 2/22/2012 4:51:00 AM

    loniliness slides its fingertips against my neck-Very profound line Drake..So great to read your poetry which always touches the heart's core-Charma

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:40:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi, Charmaine. Cool name! That's very sweet of you to say. I thank you very much for that.
  1. Date: 2/21/2012 3:51:00 PM

    Interesting work..Some very creative lines..Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for the kind review of my work,..Sara

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    That is greatly appreciated, Sara. And you're very welcome too! =)
  1. Date: 2/21/2012 12:40:00 PM

    Thank you for sharing your poetry Drake. It was a pleasure to read. Love, Carol

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    And thank you for stopping by, Carol.
  1. Date: 2/21/2012 6:11:00 AM

    Hi Drake! so nice to see something from you. This one speaks of sorrow, yet there's nothing quite like walking in the rain. Hugs, Catie :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey there, Catie! I love the rain...except when I'm driving in it. :) Thank you so very much.
  1. Date: 2/20/2012 10:05:00 PM

    powerful pen! thank you for your gregarious praise for Selene's moon

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're quite welcome. And thank YOU for stopping by here as well. =)
  1. Date: 2/20/2012 8:47:00 PM

    Drake, wow... them are some strong raindrops.... I think that is why one is driven to accept rain, as a soul reminder... of the lonely times... a great poem..thank you.. always..pd

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/22/2012 7:37:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hola PD! Yes, I wholeheartedly agree with you. Thank you kindly! =)
  1. Date: 2/20/2012 6:49:00 PM

    Great poem! Love the intensity!-Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/20/2012 8:30:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hi Jenny! =) Thank you very kindly for that! And, no problem at all. It was a very worthy read.
  1. Date: 2/20/2012 6:15:00 PM

    You have a way with words...something that's mesmerizing. I should like to take some more time reading more of your works. Thanks for the uplifting comment on a poem of mine, Drake.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 2/20/2012 6:19:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I won't stop you, Glenn. :) Thank you so very much for stopping by here! And, yes, you're quite welcome!