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MELANCHOLY

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Below is the poem entitled MELANCHOLY which was written by poet Maxeen Deas-Dennis. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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MELANCHOLY

A haunting from my past came back to see me 
that caused a misunderstanding between you and me
I cant believe this, I caused it to end, before it began,
with you as a future friend

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  1. Date: 1/30/2012 11:00:00 PM
    Hello Maxeen, and welcome to this site. You have a nice write here that needs one small correction: In your third line, it would be a good idea to change "begin" to "began". All of your other verbs are in past tense, so it would be a good idea to make them all the same. This writing is better than any of Sylvia's.

    Deas-Dennis Avatar Maxeen Deas-Dennis
    Date: 1/30/2012 11:50:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 1/30/2012 12:50:00 AM
    Umm how do I hate this let me count the ways.

  1. Date: 1/30/2012 12:44:00 AM
    This is why I love poetry .. Good work :)

    Deas-Dennis Avatar Maxeen Deas-Dennis
    Date: 1/30/2012 1:01:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, for your encouragement Bry!