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The patient crow

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The patient crow

I am trying to learn Haiku form - is this haiku?



Crow patiently waits 

Poised on a dry brittle twig

Death is not silent


© Brenda V Northeast   23rd Jan. 2012

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  1. Date: 1/23/2012 10:30:00 AM
    Heya Brenda. I do NOT want to discourage your attempts at learning haiku by giving you a list of no-no's and righteous opinion. You did a fantastic job for your 1st try. I love the play between death not being silent and the snapping/creaking/groaning of a brittle, dry twig.

  1. Date: 1/23/2012 6:54:00 AM
    Good haiku, Brenda...

  1. Date: 1/23/2012 3:21:00 AM
    Very good first try by you.I think the 3rd line here is something judgemental/interpretation.Which should not be in a haiku.The 3rd line should be something sensory.Like a snapshot.

    Northeast Avatar Brenda Victoria Northeast
    Date: 1/23/2012 4:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Kash for your kind input- I shall give it some deep thought and look more into other examples to help me analyze what you have suggested. Thank you, What I was trying to imply was the sound of the crow and the breaking twig?
  1. Date: 1/23/2012 2:26:00 AM
    Excellent Brenda. This is very good Haiku. Though I'm not good at forms Haiku is described as a Japanese form usually about nature and the count is 5, 7, 5. This is perfect. God Bless, JB

    Northeast Avatar Brenda Victoria Northeast
    Date: 1/23/2012 4:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you so much Judy- as it seems I haven't quiet hit the mark- but it is progress in little steps, Blessings, Bren