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Pretense of Love

If you were not going to 
Love me in the morning,
You should have crept away
Into the moonlight, 
Faceless
You should have left 
Before the daylight
Burst into the bedroom
With sparkling hope

You should not have stayed
Lingered
Loitered 
Laughing in my kitchen
Drinking from my plastic mug
Acting as If 
You were going to throw 
Your painted mask
Into the fire

No
You should have 
Faded away
Like an echo into a canyon
Like a name on the tip of a tongue
Like a dream almost recalled --
The only clue that you were here
An indentation in my sheets 
I could have smoothed away

Instead of This 
This pretense of love 
Of normalcy, 
Of old lovers on 
An ordinary day,
When you won’t even
Look me in the eye --

If there is no hope 
Of love
Of a you and me, an “us” 
Then please just LEAVE
I fiercely prefer 
The fleeting memory



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  1. Date: 4/20/2013 10:42:00 AM
    Great write and Great win... You really deserve it~A.O

  1. Date: 4/20/2013 6:29:00 AM
    great write and win Susan...congrats

  1. Date: 4/19/2013 9:49:00 PM
    Susan, Congratulations IN HONOR OF Andrea's favorite POEM contest. *Always & Forever' @->- LINDA -<-@

  1. Date: 4/19/2013 9:35:00 PM
    Many congrats my dear friend Susan! This is indeed great and amazing heartfelt write! I love it so much & so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing this gem of yours! Big hugs in return! Have a grace-filled day! Love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 4/19/2013 8:38:00 PM
    Susan, a sweet win~*~SKAT

  1. Date: 11/14/2012 7:54:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win in Nathan's "Free Verse Writers" contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/12/2012 12:52:00 PM
    THANKXX SUSAN FOR CHOOSING MY ENTRY AS A WINNER FOR ANY POEM CONTEST LUV .. AM SO HAPPY U ENJOY MY WORDS .. AS I DO YOURS LUV ..

  1. Date: 11/12/2012 9:09:00 AM
    well penned Susan.....congrats on your win and thank you so much for mine...

  1. Date: 11/11/2012 11:26:00 PM
    CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR BIG WIN MY DEAR FRIEND SUSAN! CHEERS! Thank you so much for sharing and also for my placement in your "Wrongfully Imprisonment" contest. More power and graces to you always! love/hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 11/11/2012 11:12:00 PM
    CONGRATS SUSAN ON A TREMENDOUS WRITE AND WIN FOR FREE VERSE LUV .. ALSO THANKXX FOR MY WINNING PLACE IN WRONGFUL IMPRISONMENT .. A GREAT CHALLENGE LUV ..

  1. Date: 11/11/2012 7:27:00 PM
    ' Good win' Nate

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 7:21:00 PM
    Such a powerful read congrats. on your win Susan, love,vie

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 5:54:00 PM
    Congrats on your win, Susan! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 1:21:00 PM
    congrats Susan on a stupendous win for this elegant entry luv.. great emotional lines that reach into the depth of the heart ...

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 1:13:00 PM
    congrats on your contest win, this one cuts like a knife...I've read the razor's edge of your poetry before; you're a powerful writer...

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 11:55:00 AM
    Congratulations to you on your placement in Debbie Guzzi's "Your Own Favorite Poem" contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 11:19:00 AM
    Susan, I like Bob's comment below. Damn, your ending really leaves this poem with a strong kick in the gut. Very emotive. Congratulations on your win in Debbie's contest!

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 10:07:00 AM
    This is beautiful Sue. A sentiment not restricted to the fairer sex. We men too have been played. Congratulations

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 9:47:00 AM
    Congrats, Sue. Awesome write. Well deserved win. Nice going. Best to you and yours. luv Ralph

  1. Date: 2/7/2012 9:01:00 AM
    so true Sue there was a point when I wanted THEM to feel the way they make us feel..I did it once or twice to 'try on' the behavior..I'm glad to say I was as disgusted with myself when I acted that way as I was with them/men! Congrad's on your fine win. Light & Love

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