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Time to Pay the Toll

Your piercing eyes warp my soul
These callous games seem coldly unjust
Time is up…now pay the toll

Your intense stare and polished stroll
Littering your path with futile dust
Your piercing eyes warp my soul

Your arduous antics temper my parole 
A petite portion of fleeting lust 
Time is up…now pay the toll

Your lifeless heart beats caked with coal
Your fingertips roam laced with rust
Your piercing eyes warp my soul

My psyche is spent, the rest you stole
Your ego sways awkwardly robust
Time is up…now pay the toll

So close to your vainglorious goal
I wish my desires to flee in a gust
Your piercing eyes warp my soul
Time is up…now pay the toll

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  1. Date: 1/30/2012 3:42:00 PM

    pretty good

  1. Date: 1/27/2012 6:46:00 PM

    Congratulations on a great write. Best regards, Jon

  1. Date: 1/26/2012 12:27:00 AM

    A belated congratulations on your win Natalie.Enjoyed the write.

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 9:28:00 PM

    Natalie, such a wonderful poem; it just flow so nicely. I really like the Villanelle form, it works so well, Greg

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 6:35:00 PM

    very interesting rhyme you chose with the "ust" it made for some great unrequited love line! Congrats on your win with this fine villanelle!

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 5:14:00 PM

    Natalie, Way to go, everything expressed so well---Time to pay kiddo! Love it, Craig

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 5:14:00 PM

    Natalie, Way to go, everything expressed so well---Time to pay kiddo! Love it, Craig

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 8:53:00 AM

    congrats Natalie on a fantastic win for this exciting entry.. amazing as always luv,.

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 6:17:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win in Francine's ""4 forms 4 themes" contest Natalie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 5:19:00 AM

    Great topic for the reverberating villanele..Congrats to some wonderfully constructed lines. Love, Gwendolen

  1. Date: 1/25/2012 1:51:00 AM

    Natalie congrats on your win, great villanele..David

  1. Date: 1/24/2012 10:34:00 PM

    Well done Natalie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 1/24/2012 9:16:00 PM

    congrats on your third place win with this villanelle Natalie, great job

  1. Date: 1/16/2012 2:34:00 PM

    I love this write, Natalie. Many congrats to you too, my friend : ) And so glad you've got that lovely new car - well done again on winning it

  1. Date: 1/16/2012 3:20:00 AM

    Such a good write Natalie good luck in the comp Declan xxx

  1. Date: 1/15/2012 7:35:00 PM

    I really like villanelles and you have graced us with a prime example of what they are capable of when well executed. Love it Natalie. I wish you the best in the contest

  1. Date: 1/15/2012 11:22:00 AM

    Thanks to Francine's contest, I've been seeing a lot of villanelle poems lately. This is one of the better ones I've read. Good work.

  1. Date: 1/15/2012 8:39:00 AM

    just riveting, nats... a piece flowing between pain and letting go... greeat stuff for the contest! :) huggs

  1. Date: 1/14/2012 10:59:00 PM

    Natalie....no....no hidden political meaning! my feelings....our democracy is hanging by a thread....your poem...."vainglorious" MAGNIFICENT!.....fresh...original...superb! jimbo

  1. Date: 1/14/2012 12:11:00 PM

    Well written Natalie, a great one for the contest, rooting for you, love,vie

  1. Date: 1/14/2012 11:44:00 AM

    Smile! ˜ Moving ˜ And. Speaking from my own willing perspectives, Yessss, I do plan on paying the tolls.... ˜ And then collecting the rest ˜ Love, John!:) ˜

  1. Date: 1/14/2012 11:16:00 AM

    Natalie, superb, I love this form, great to see you back missed your writing, suppose you have been too busy cruising eh, ha ha ha, best of luck..David

  1. Date: 1/14/2012 11:02:00 AM

    Natalie, I am impressed. You did a superb job with this form! You pulled off a classy slam here, through and through. Yes, this is a classy slam for sure. Very strong words.