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Behind the Drapes

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Behind the Drapes

I always know when it’s last call
That’s when he stumbles home
He’s armed and he’s dangerous
With nowhere to go
But even in his drunken sweat
He knows his next target -
He shuts the windows,
And pulls the drapes closed

Then he’s yelling through the house
I don’t know what it’s about
I’m behind the closet door
Crouched down on the floor
All I can hear is the sound 
Of my heart beating
I don’t even realize I’m screaming
As he drags me out by my feet…

We have barbeques outside
And then he’s Mr. Nice Guy
He has all the neighbors fooled
With his helpful attitude
They never see 
The monster inside -
He pulls the drapes closed,
And that monster comes alive

He screams and he shouts
Rampaging through the house
All because of a joke
Our kitchen wall has a hole
I run behind the bed
Scrambling to get under it instead
But he yanks me out by the head…

I wake up later on the floor
Wondering who I am anymore
I feel like a pathetic version of me
No longer brave, no longer free
I dream of leaving him every night
But when I’ve left, I’ve paid the price
I don’t know how much more 
I can take - 
Maybe if I provoke him, 
He’ll end this charade…
I stare at paisley drapes
Tan and red swirl in my face

I look up at the walls
If the walls could speak
What would they say?
Would they be my Witness’s,
Or would they turn and run away?
Succumbing to Intimidation?
Fearing Retaliation?
Would there ever be 
Any Validation?
Any Compassion?
Or just more of this 
Inaction?

One time I hid behind the drapes
But he found me anyway

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  1. Date: 5/26/2012 10:51:00 PM

    Came back to read your poem again. It has haunted me. I'm glad to read in the comments that this is a fictional write. Bringing light to domestic violence with accuracy and honesty is what you gave done so well with this amazing write. God bless you. Rhonda

  1. Date: 5/24/2012 7:05:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win, Susan. Your poem gives me chills. I can feel the fear. I grew up seeing my mother physically abused by my step-father. Thank God he stopped. He just seemed to mellow with age but I still remember nights like this. Such an awful way to live. I pray this is fiction...Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 5/23/2012 7:29:00 AM

    Congratulations on your second place win with this wonderful poem!!! Lori

  1. Date: 5/23/2012 5:18:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved win in P.D.'s "Long Poem" contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 11:23:00 PM

    Yes I too hope this is really fiction, very sad. But amazing narration. Congratulations on the win!

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 10:18:00 PM

    Susan, Congratulations with your awesome long long poem! Thank you for supporting my contest. Good night ~*~ALWAYS * the one and only :-) PD

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 9:16:00 PM

    Oh dear....I hope this is fiction as well !! Very compassionate writing on the part of the wounded soul. Congrats on your placement in the contest ~~

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 8:55:00 PM

    I hope it's just fiction. Very well written, Susan! Congrats on your win. Ruben.

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 8:43:00 PM

    Yes, one of your best poems here with a deserved high win. Congrats, Susan.

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 8:34:00 PM

    Nice piece of poetry,Susan...Congratulations on your win.....

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 8:09:00 PM

    congrats on your win Susan

  1. Date: 5/22/2012 2:42:00 PM

    Susan congrats on your win..David

  1. Date: 3/9/2012 11:51:00 AM

    Susan congrats on your win, get thicker drapes...David

  1. Date: 3/9/2012 9:51:00 AM

    congrats Susan on winning an HM for this marvelous piece on this eerie persona luv.. happy weekend..

  1. Date: 3/9/2012 6:45:00 AM

    Congratulations on your placement in Yasmin's contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/31/2012 7:44:00 AM

    You really make me spend my 7 rating here, Susan! This is very good, I felt like I'm that girl herself.

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 10:58:00 PM

    Congratulation on your win, my friend. Loved and enjoyed it. bl

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 10:13:00 PM

    Congratulations on your great write. Best regards, Jon

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 9:23:00 PM

    Susan, I am happy to see DEBS realized how great your narrative poem was here. A big congratulations to you. WEll deserved,my friend.

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 8:50:00 AM

    Very powerful story here Susan-A big congrats. to you.

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 6:38:00 AM

    Congratulations on you win in Debbie Guzzi's contest Susan. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/9/2012 12:36:00 AM

    love the last line, susan.. great wrote with sweet congrats on your great win! :) huggs!

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 10:53:00 PM

    A sad by well told tale Susan. Congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 9:08:00 PM

    Congrats. Susan on your special win love, vie

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 8:13:00 PM

    CONGRATS SUSAN ON A WONDERFUL WIN FOR AN AWESOME STORY .. ALWAYS A WINNER TO ME..LUV..

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 1:46:00 PM

    I am sorry to know this goes on behind closed doors of so many victims of spousal or child abuse, but each time someone writes the story, it brings more awareness and perhaps can make a difference. Kuddos to you!

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 1:20:00 PM

    A hard row to hoe here...hopefully you found the will and courage to leave and leave without turning into the monster he is..[I have always had caste iron cookware for just this reason a fry pan up side his head could have put the end to him! ahhh but then we would turn into the monster!] Congrad's on YOU. Light & Love

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 11:35:00 AM

    I see some concerned poets here, susan, but luckily I know this is NOT your lot, you just know how to describe it REALLy well. hey, i am going very slow on this laptop I'm forced to use. If you happen to like my poem I emailed and want to add a comedy poem to it, could you please send it back to my email with your own poem above or below it and I would get to it at the school computer. If you want to do something else, I understand. Tell me what it is! You are the greatest. Andrea

  1. Date: 1/8/2012 3:21:00 AM

    Gosh Susan I hope this isn't your lot. get out if it is. Good write very scary though. Thanks for oyu supportive comments and yes i have some time now and will look in more on your stuff xx

  1. Date: 1/6/2012 8:05:00 AM

    Wow, a very chilling reality for some and you've brought that up here with such starkness... based from your response to my blog, I hope this is not your personal experience...but I do wish strength and courage for all those experiencing this-- very stirring write, Susan...also, thanks for what you said about my booger write :) I will keep my fingers crossed on my nostrils heehee....hugs to you

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