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Planet of the Apes - Destiny

He’s finally free,
With his mate riding horseback.
Leaves prints in the sand.

Plans to change his world,
Now dominated by apes,
Do not kill for sport.

He then sees the past,
Fallen Lady Liberty,
Unveils man’s future.


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  1. Date: 12/28/2011 10:41:00 PM

    Greg, you wrote this very well up until the last line. You have six syllables there which is one too many. How about changing that last line to "Man's future revealed"? Just a suggestion among many possibilities.

    Pettit Avatar Robert Pettit Date: 12/28/2011 11:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    You're a good writer, Greg. I knew you would come up with a good solution.
    Stanley Avatar Greg Stanley Date: 12/28/2011 10:59:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Wow - I usually double-check these things. Thanks Robert. I like your suggestion too.