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I would write you a song
about the months you held me
close with your abandonment issues

I would hold your memories within
cerebellum sanctity,
but you gave me amnesia
as you kissed me long enough
to forget you

I would take you back within
sudden breaths exhale,
but you choked the joy out of my pores

A leaky careless whisper

A silent scream
dripping heartfelt octaves of worthlessness

I would remove this wall for you,
but you already crippled my dialect
muting honorable intentions to be a better man

I would
let you become a chorus in God's song,
but you refuse to ever be more
than a broken sin

© Drake J. Eszes

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  1. Date: 12/11/2011 10:19:00 AM

    This is great. I like where the lines cut off, it suspends and then reveals more. You certainly have a way with words, sir. Also thank you for your comment.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/11/2011 1:39:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Careyanna (beautiful name, btw), thank you. That is sweet of you to say. =)
  1. Date: 12/9/2011 7:11:00 AM

    Ahhhhh My friend, you have grabbed the reader with the title and the rest is history.. Excelle write my friend.. Michael

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/11/2011 1:38:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much, Michael! That was the plan. :)
  1. Date: 12/7/2011 6:34:00 PM

    You have a way with positives and negatives that heave me around the page and excite my mind to the extent I must read it again. Always fascinating Drake. I gave as much of your style as I could in the only one I ever wrote like this called "The Dance". If I read enough of yours maybe I'll get the hang of it but for now you fascinate me! Luv, Lizzy

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/8/2011 9:06:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Your comments are blowing my mind here. That means alot. I'll have to look that writing up, if I haven't already. :) Your style is awesome. Thank you so much!
  1. Date: 12/4/2011 10:20:00 PM

    Absolutely captivating Drake, I especially love how you ended this gem.. I dig the title too ;-)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/8/2011 9:08:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey hey Wilma! That is awesome of you to say. Thank you. I was hoping the title would hit hard for those who noticed. :)
  1. Date: 12/3/2011 8:19:00 PM

    Right on, Drake. This poem reads like a classy "slam". By the end, it cuts like a knife. Well done.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/3/2011 8:21:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Yo Chris! I am grateful you caught the drift of this. Thank you so so much! :)
  1. Date: 12/3/2011 4:37:00 PM

    Wow Drake-that is the way to tell her! Fantastic lyrics here :)

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/3/2011 8:17:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I couldn't agree more. Thank you so much, Natalie! :)
  1. Date: 12/3/2011 4:24:00 PM

    Thanks for reading, "Luna Yearns" and the kind comment. This cut which you've eloquently written about is only as deep as the one given, Drake..as always, it is best to let go. What's the cliche, "You can bring the horse to water, but you can't make it drink"...Enjoyed reading this well-written, descriptive piece of work. Annalise

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/3/2011 8:17:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey hey Annalise! Yes, the cliche is quite true. That is very sweet of you. Thank you!
  1. Date: 12/3/2011 12:18:00 PM

    Awesome, with chilly overtones. Enjoyed. I will get those books out this week. hugs, Catie

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/3/2011 8:16:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Hey Catie! Yeah, it was a nice chill. Gave me the warm fuzzies. :) Ok, awesome. Thank you so much!!!
  1. Date: 12/3/2011 8:23:00 AM

    A very beautiful poem in many ways~... Life will come around.. I sure have had a nice time stopping by your poems today... Also thank you for the super smile... and image of you eating Eggo's... lol... yes perfect with my poem... have a nice one,..p.d.

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 12/3/2011 8:15:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    For you to take the time to visit my work means a lot. LOL and you're SO welcome. :)