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Something Not Right

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Something Not Right

To Carol’s pumpkin patch I did go With my little red wagon behind in tow A fifty pound one I would use for show Through teeth and eyes an eerie light would glow To my surprise as I did a double take First impressions were thoughts that they were fake “White pumpkins!” I felt to see if I were awake “White pumpkins!” Oh give me a break Acidity in her soil Carol said of her spoil Of such the flush of pumpkins were soiled Funny feeling I had of maybe getting oiled Pumpkins bleached white as though they had been boiled Spoiled, soiled and oiled and maybe even broiled By a promise, of free pumpkin, I am so embroiled A sucker for free stuff, so rub me also with palm oil It is Halloween, so I must assume this spoil A golden pumpkin delight is white of spite In acidity soil, echoes my usual plight, something doesn’t seem well for day is not night Though with my pumpkin white, I split the site In honor of Carol Brown And Contest

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  1. Date: 11/18/2011 2:12:00 AM
    I don't think I've ever seen a white pumpkin, what next -white carrots!!! Congrats on your success with this humourous verse John, thank you for your kind comments to me...cheers Margaret

  1. Date: 11/18/2011 12:53:00 AM
    Congrats on your win , love it xx

  1. Date: 11/17/2011 10:01:00 PM
    Congrats Moses on another grand win .. a wow wonder luv...

  1. Date: 11/17/2011 4:17:00 PM
    Congrats, John. Excellent piece. Enjoyed. Nice going. Ralph

  1. Date: 11/17/2011 3:17:00 PM
    Congrats. on your 2nd place win John, hugs, Vie

  1. Date: 11/17/2011 2:11:00 PM
    Well at least you gave that white pumpkin a chance. That's more than I did. Thanks for the chance to read your version of the white pumpkin tale. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 11/17/2011 12:48:00 PM
    Congratulations on your placement in my "What No Orange Pumpkin" contest Moses. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/27/2011 6:17:00 PM
    Wow! Super story behind this imaginative poem, John. Love the way you worked Carol's soil into the story, but I was laughing at you being a "sucker for free stuff." Way to go, my friend! Surely a winner. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 10/27/2011 5:13:00 PM
    far out John- really, white!

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    Date: 10/27/2011 6:09:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    yep, afraid so. smile
  1. Date: 10/27/2011 12:43:00 PM
    Thank you for supporting the contest Moses. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/27/2011 12:11:00 PM
    It's not right! I agree, pumpkins are not white. We have one, I carved it to look like a skeleton. Tony