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Mini Dubai

Two sparrows kiss,sitting
On a high bough of the tamarind.
 
Like a tamarind seed, my town, nicknamed 'Mini Dubai',
Had burgeoned and branched on the bank of  Kanoli canal.

Now the silvered canal sprawls on its death-bed.

Busy pedestrians walk down
An ancient bridge, built by the British.
As the traffic light has lost its eye balls,
A potbellied police man dances and controls.
Jalopies groan, and modern cars whiz.
A long whistle:an ambulance with the wounded
And a van with the wedding party, halt side by side,
As the southern and the northern hemispheres  
Of emotions meet at a single point ,by chance.

The nostalgic smell of the canal sops in the sizzling tang from a cafeteria.

Among the concrete buildings that seethe under the tanning rays,
The splurging women whirl in the hurry wind.The stink of sweat
And the aroma of the Arabian perfumes choke the air in shops,
Where, sometimes, the chicanery peek through the glassed.
To the government offices nearby, the applications drafted in blood 
And salt, scurry only to get the obsequies in the waste baskets. 
The sots creep like snakes in the yard of Sandra Bar

A crow sits on an electric post and watches all below with a smile of wisdom.



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  1. Date: 3/28/2013 9:28:00 PM

    Congratulations, with your winning poem FAB , I'm also stopping by to say hi, and wish you an early Happy Easter, just in case I don't have time to stop by in the next few days. take care and have yourself a good one~ Always & Forever *LINDA"

  1. Date: 3/27/2013 5:23:00 PM

    Fabiyas , a nice winning poem, Congrats~SKAT

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 7:19:00 PM

    Fabiyas I love this write. Congrats. Rick

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 8:30:00 AM

    Fabiyas, excellent introduction to this wonderful, unusual place, you capture it so vividly, congratulations on your win.

  1. Date: 3/24/2013 1:41:00 AM

    My hearty congratulations on this fantastic poem of yours my dear friend Fabiyas! I extremely love and enjoyed reading it and the picture you've portrayed is amazing. Thank you so much for your full support in my contest. Have a blessed Palm Sunday/Weekend! love and hugs, Leonora

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 8:46:00 PM

    Great work, Fabiyas! Beautiful descriptions! Congrats on your top win in Chris's Contest! Ruben.

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 12:59:00 PM

    Congratulations on your placement in Chris' "Let The Masks Fall" contest Fab. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 11:40:00 AM

    congrats Fab, I can relate to the jalopies ,old bridge and the nostalgic smell of the canal.. brings back memories of the basin road canals and also the ones market road at ernakulam..electrifying poetry...congrats once more on the placement.....~sashi

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:17:00 AM

    congrats on your win from my wife. Ron. thank you for concern for her health.

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:08:00 AM

    wonderful poem, such excellent imagery. Congratulations on your win in Chris' contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 6:55:00 AM

    Such a wonderful write, almost like a camera swinging across the scene but with all the senses peeked then panning up to the crow for a Hitchcock ending. Many Congrats

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 3:45:00 AM

    You made me smile as I read that last line of yours, Fabiyas! Made me wonder of what that wise crow thinks! Your imagery here is wonderful! As if I was there in Mini Dubai :) Enjoyed this one! Congrats on your win!! :D

  1. Date: 3/22/2012 10:44:00 PM

    Superb imagery - it brought me somewhere else. And the ending is a brilliant way to wrap it all up. Thank you for supporting my contest!

  1. Date: 1/19/2012 8:17:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win for your poem in Debbie's "City Lights" contest Fab. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/19/2012 5:33:00 AM

    this is a beautifully descriptive poem which brought the city to life. congratulations on the contest win!

  1. Date: 1/18/2012 10:48:00 PM

    A very descriptive write. Well done. Congratulations on your win Fabiyas

  1. Date: 1/18/2012 8:40:00 PM

    Yes, my friend from Dubai,loved your new fantastic one and enjoyed.....'A crow.......of wisdom'. Thanks for sharing, bl

  1. Date: 12/30/2011 8:49:00 PM

    Dear Fabiyas M V, I must Congratulate YOU on YOUR Wins in Destroyer Poet's and Tracie's Contest and YOUR exceptional win in Debbie's contest but I must ask; why would YOU destroy a Poets dream of winning a contest by submitting a POEM that is no where near what the Sponsor asked for I think YOU belittle YOUR fellow POETS. I ask YOU to delete this from my contest as YOU have not followed the rules, are YOU so ashamed YOU can't put YOUR name on it or follow the Rules; Someone Suffers YOUR Liege-HG

  1. Date: 12/19/2011 11:40:00 PM

    fab, a late~ congratulations on your wonderful win. In my "you pick a poem contest" ;-) Thank you for the support,.hope you are enjoying your holidays~.p.d.

  1. Date: 12/19/2011 5:41:00 AM

    Congratulations on your super win in P.D.'s "It's Up To You" contest Fab. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 12/18/2011 3:56:00 AM

    Love this poem Fabiyas.Congrats on your win.

  1. Date: 12/18/2011 12:16:00 AM

    and CONGRATULATIONS!!!( a week later after commenting!)

  1. Date: 12/17/2011 2:06:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win Fabiyas

  1. Date: 12/13/2011 2:48:00 PM

    Like your poem! Where did you write it? What country is it about? Sounds like the Middle East. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 12/9/2011 10:56:00 PM

    just rereading this one. This sounds so exotic. ONe of your best!

  1. Date: 10/24/2011 10:58:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Tracie's "Everyone Knows" contest Fabiyas. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/22/2011 9:14:00 PM

    Congrats Fabiyas on your HM in this contest with this superb and exciting entry my friend.. oh so happy PS running smooth once again as I have missed u luv..

  1. Date: 10/22/2011 1:44:00 PM

    Congrats, Fab. Excellent. Nice going. Have a great weekend. Ralph

  1. Date: 10/22/2011 8:21:00 AM

    Congratulations on your HM Fabias

  1. Date: 10/22/2011 12:02:00 AM

    VERY descriptive and great imagery, Fabiyas! You bring the town to life!

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