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One Way Ticket

Two lovers meet in park
The sun dims…not quite dark
She has some life changing news
She gives it to him straight
Tells him she’s nine days late
He gets his flask and downs booze
He says “things will be fine”
Takes her home, time confines
Grabs his passport…leaves no clues


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  1. Date: 12/8/2011 10:48:00 AM

    Yep, cool, Natalie, tell it like it is, thats show biss, "downs booze... leaves no clues... leaves baby with the blues... Sorry SOG. Congrats on your worthy three. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 12/7/2011 9:14:00 PM

    The old, old story of betrayal. Congratulations on your win Natalie

  1. Date: 12/7/2011 5:37:00 PM

    OH MAN, was this ever awesome. I love that ending. I mean, not a happy one for HER but just something you would expect a super jerk to do! Congrats on your win. this was a great fun read.

  1. Date: 12/7/2011 2:23:00 PM

    Wow. A love affair from start to finish in nine lines. Can't get much shorter then that. Congratulations Natalie

  1. Date: 12/7/2011 12:52:00 PM

    Congratulations on your placement in Moses' "Beautiful" contest Natalie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 12/7/2011 12:35:00 PM

    Natalie, congrats on your win, she should have waited for his passport to run out first..David

  1. Date: 10/24/2011 8:04:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Dr. Ram's "Balassi Stanza" contest Natalie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 4:34:00 PM

    Raw and real.. am lovin' all the ways this form can be used! Dig the write, Natalie, congrats! Namaste~N

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 11:10:00 AM

    So the way of being a father..Enjoyed reading your creative work..Congrats on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 8:42:00 AM

    Congrats Natalie on an amazing win with this elegant entry of poetic art my friend.. always a treasure to read your expressiions..luv..

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 5:48:00 AM

    Congrads to you Nats!

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 5:20:00 AM

    Natilie, Cool poem, Smile, Congratulations on your win. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 10/23/2011 3:45:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win in my contest, Natalie

  1. Date: 9/26/2011 12:40:00 AM

    wow .. but it happens Natalie.. very well put in poetic language..luv..good luck in the contest...