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pash

My name is passion williams
i'm very secretive about my feelings
though i am outsoken when asked about opinon

i will do anything to complete my dreams
i don't anything stand in my way
i don't care if any one doesn't like it

i am very persistent and athletic
i am strong mentally,phsically,emtionally
i have a whole lot of strength

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  1. Date: 7/2/2011 8:42:00 PM

    your poem is very strong, but a suggestion,in the second paragraph, second sentence it doesn't make sense. maybe if you added "let". and on the third paragraph you added mentally twice, maybe it would be best to say emotionally. these are only suggestions mind you. I am only trying to be helpful