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Sunrise On The Milkyway

A slow bright rising 
 prevailing amongst 
vast darkness.
Set a sail on an ocean 
of stars, mixed colours:
Blazing, ripping, pulling.
Evolving on the shoulders
of millenniums , one after another
Constipating life.

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  1. Date: 6/6/2011 7:10:00 AM

    i could see the sun rising... that is what you did painted a vivid picture with your words......a very wonderful verse libre...reading it fourth time around....

  1. Date: 6/2/2011 5:35:00 PM

    It has a beauty all its own that is your work and God's ..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

  1. Date: 5/28/2011 8:08:00 AM

    Awesome write and imagery on this poem Derrick. Thank you for your comments, much appreciated. God Bless Phyl

  1. Date: 5/27/2011 12:53:00 PM

    a great write Derrick, enjoyed reading this one.

  1. Date: 5/26/2011 1:49:00 AM

    Pun intended, but that would be a lot of crap. Good poem Derrict. appreciate you commenting on mine. I'm going back to find a few more of yours. Charles

  1. Date: 5/25/2011 3:48:00 AM

    A good, descriptive write, using poetic language. Regards, Robert.

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 8:21:00 PM

    Awesome imagery, Derrick!! Unusual poem.

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 4:19:00 PM

    Brilliant images of the night sky, Derrick. Taking a three-day fishing trip and I know we'll be able to see the Milky Way as well as some planets when we're far offshore. The last line was very intriguing. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 3:47:00 PM

    beautiful imagery to create a fine visual, derrick

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 2:17:00 PM

    A mind blower, the Milkyway. I like this poem mucho. LOve, daver

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 1:41:00 PM

    rich imagery with an expensive language....u have presented this very beautifully....marvellous !

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 1:18:00 PM

    yes great imagery and well done. thank you for commenting on Tender Heart.

  1. Date: 5/24/2011 12:45:00 PM

    Thanks for your comment Derrick.Great imagery and a wonderful poem you have penned here.