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Vacant

Vacant
Stripped of substance
Deserting enshrined space
Emptiness naps upon cobwebs
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  1. Date: 1/16/2010 5:28:00 PM

    Love that line, emptiness naps upon cobwebs! You are quite the descriptive writer! andrea

  1. Date: 1/9/2010 4:53:00 PM

    A very imaginative description to illustrate "Vacant" and very well written cinquain. Interesting read. Thanks for sharing, Caroline.

  1. Date: 11/29/2009 12:47:00 PM

    Very eloquent...expresses poignant emotion..Take good care John... Always, Farah

  1. Date: 10/12/2009 10:34:00 AM

    I have found cinquain's are hard to express real emotion....but you nailed it!! "emptiness naps upon cobwebs"....brilliant!! Wow! ....Love, Carrie ...ps..soupmail reply!

  1. Date: 10/12/2009 7:27:00 AM

    John this is excellent - wonderful penmanship as always - I have missed reading your poetry a lot - it is always in a class all its own - Glad and honored to read your writing again, God Bless, mj

  1. Date: 10/12/2009 5:28:00 AM

    John, this write tore at my heartstrings.As always a ~~~Magnificent piece~~~. It is so wonderful to see a post from you. Hope there are more coming. Thank you for sharing and please stick around for a while. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/11/2009 6:03:00 PM

    John, you describe a hollowness that seems so prevalent in these times. We seek to fill the void with eartly things, to no avail. Well written cinquain. Hugs, Donna

  1. Date: 10/11/2009 4:48:00 PM

    Very thought-provoking cinquain, John. It's bad enough when "places" are vacant, but many times people's hearts, minds and souls have the type of vacancy you describe. I have felt this way myself at times. Compelling write! Love, Carolyn