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ocean commotion

wind lifts salty air
scent of the sea fills my hair --
fishing without care

pelican dives fast
shrimp on the hook was my last --
strips the bait I cast

turn with quick motion
see crab stealing sun lotion --
ocean commotion



*Entry for Carol’s Rhyming Haiku contest

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  1. Date: 3/11/2011 12:57:00 PM

    I knowvery little about japanese forms but even I can recognise charm and skill when I see it "scent of the sea fills my hair"....mmmmm I can almost taste it....congrats and well done, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/11/2011 7:51:00 AM

    Congrats Carolyn on your 1st place win with this beautiful Haiku!---kashinath

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 3:49:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win..Sara

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 11:53:00 AM

    Congrats on your great win.........George

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 10:13:00 AM

    A pleasure dear one to see you again at the top Carolyn. Congratulations"getting to be a good habit" on your worthy first place win. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 10:06:00 AM

    Hey Carolyn, congratulations on this gem winning in Carol's contest, love Wilma

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 8:53:00 AM

    Wonderful images in this sensational Haiku., Carolyn. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 6:08:00 AM

    Congratulations on the win in my contest Carolyn. Thank you for supporting my contest and my decision to run my contest my way. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 12:04:00 AM

    Lovely ocean commotion Carolyn. many congrats dear friend.

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 7:56:00 PM

    Lets pack it all in and go fishing. Congrats on your "ocean commotion"..Love, LNC

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 5:57:00 PM

    Nicely done! It makes me want to go fishing! RAY

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 4:55:00 PM

    anything less than first place would have been a literary tragedy! Congratulations Carolyn!

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 3:40:00 PM

    Even your title begins a clever rhyming sense of joy!! Makes me long for a trip to the ocean!! Congratulations, Carolyn!!

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 2:47:00 PM

    lovely word picture here I can't wait! Light & Love CONGRAD's

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 2:42:00 PM

    have some honery animals! :)

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 2:33:00 PM

    you are super -duper no.1 here, carols... winning streak for this UBER SUPERB win... thumbs for the well-deserved hot! :) huggs, nette

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 2:04:00 PM

    Congratulations, Carolyn : ) I didn't realise I'd got a first too until Dr Ram and Andrea told me. Jack.

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 2:00:00 PM

    Very descriptive and I can see you fishing in the sunshine. congratulations on your no. 1. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 1:54:00 PM

    I remember this cute one, CArolyn, Big congrats to you.

  1. Date: 3/9/2011 1:46:00 PM

    Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carol, Carolyn

  1. Date: 3/7/2011 10:37:00 PM

    Very fun set of haiku you have here, Carolyn :) enjoyed that last one especially -- and thank you for dropping by my poems-- heehee happy you enjoyed my ewwy poem, it didn't make it though but that's ok-- I enjoyed writing that one--:D although now I wonder whether I should've revealed those aspects of myself? Haha! I am too whacked O_o

  1. Date: 3/6/2011 7:35:00 PM

    Okay Carolyn! I now have figured out how you keep turning out these incredible writes!! You sit on the edge of the ocean with all it's relaxing properties letting your creativity flow. ......Meanwhile, I sit here with a house full of screaming children fighting over video game controllers!! ha ha. I enjoyed this one..especially the humorous twist at the conclusion. Gwendolen

  1. Date: 3/6/2011 5:17:00 AM

    Sweet poetic potion! Time to slap on some coconut lotion and head out to your ocean of commotion! Perfect read for me today! Pure Devotion + Raw Emotion. Can't wait to see more from you this way. ~JS Lambert

  1. Date: 3/5/2011 10:04:00 AM

    This is a winner, Carolyn. I wanted to let you know that I changed the last line of the 2nd verse to bring myself into the madness after reading your blog. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 3/4/2011 1:23:00 PM

    I love the feeling from this write, been busy at work and Im trying to catch up... love Michael

  1. Date: 3/3/2011 5:27:00 PM

    Enjoyable haiku! I recently sold an article about pelicans. Can you tell me how to contact Publish America because I want to pulbish a poetry book with them. Peace & Love Carolyn Devonshire

  1. Date: 3/3/2011 4:41:00 PM

    enjoyed this one very much Carolyn. An adventure full of story and imagery and the name is perfect. Love it

  1. Date: 3/3/2011 1:20:00 PM

    What a lovely sketch this would make, even done in animation. Nice one Carolyn, good luck in Carol's contest. ( the hickey's were not in the beard ) have a lovely evening....:) smiles

  1. Date: 3/3/2011 10:48:00 AM

    What a fun poem! Love it. And thanks for your kind comments on my poem,Carolyn : ) Jack

  1. Date: 3/3/2011 9:53:00 AM

    Good luck in contest.... Thanks for the nice comments.......George

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