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Upon Seeing A Girl

If I could depart from reality,
and overlook the night's mask
upon the grieving girl, who
exudes the royalty of my perceived
utopia, then by words and emotions
entwined and compelled, love could
transform the mediocrity of my terabithia,
into the enchanting vision of a heavens
background, and create the paradox
of a lover's xanadu

For within her eyes, could lie the
tremble of a paradise lost, found,
imagined, and wished into the world
of my endured isolation, by the mere
greeting of strangers, I could be possessed
again by the spirit of Romeo, and see
within her eyes, the soul of my Juliet,
Embarking on the foreshadowed promise
of a poet's discovery of his eternal muse,
Or assume that by her grace, I was meant
to be salvaged from myself, and loved
clean of every single lapse in faith

Thus by a smile and unending moment,
when eyes align and release gazes that
pierce the pain of past, and deftly penetrate
the pathway, to the secluded vulnerability of
the rues and desires of the heart, I uncover
the sweetness that sleeps within her presence,
and she shelters the tenderness in mine, For 
a moment we know one another, and as we
both know the magic that could be born from
the innocence of a fortuitous meeting, 

Hearts alike shield themselves rather than 
risk future agony, As I am her and she is me,
 A goodbye is established before the hello infatuates us,
Thus hearts alike choose to cherish the perfection
of a romantic moment, And never degrade the only
blink in time, when human nature allowed us 
to be "perfect" soul mates, by definition,

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  1. Date: 8/4/2011 7:38:00 AM

    Congratulations on your poetry making it through round one in the PoetrySoup International Poetry contest. I wish you the best in the final round Audonus. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/1/2011 10:36:00 AM

    Congrats Audonus on your featured poem. Vince

  1. Date: 8/1/2011 8:37:00 AM

    Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week on PoetrySoup Audonus. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 7/31/2011 7:07:00 PM

    Congrats Adonus on your featured poem this week on PS.. a wonderful one to share with luv..

  1. Date: 12/4/2010 1:27:00 PM

    Good one...I especially like the last stanza..Just for a moment perfection..Usually the way it happens ..I was delighted that you dropped by my work "Night Of Desire"..I was inspired to write this one after reading Edna St. Vincent Mallay..

  1. Date: 12/4/2010 7:19:00 AM

    A beautiful poem about the power love holds over our hearts, Audonus! Than you for giving us this experience. I'm still looking for my perfect soul mate and now I know what I'm seeking.

  1. Date: 12/4/2010 5:52:00 AM

    From start to finish Audonus this is an astonishing write, beautifully penned imagery and captivating tone flow throughout this magnificent read. I thank you for sharing the read and for your marvelous comments on my poem "Cheaper to Keep Her" .... Many Blessings, Always, Adell

  1. Date: 12/3/2010 8:42:00 PM

    This reminds me of when Romeo laid eyes on Juliet or lancelot on Guinevere. Very romantic writing! NICE!

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 7:30:00 PM

    Hello Audonus, I remember being in Europe several years ago, I had an encounter very close to what you are talking about here. I never returned his gaze but I was so enchanted I remember him to this day. Your words are so beautiful, they make my heart sing. As Always, Shar

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 6:19:00 PM

    replied to soup mail, back,,, p.d.

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 5:10:00 PM

    I'm living proof that love does come and our other connecting puzzle piece is out there and will fall into its place in do time. Your comments inspire me to write better . Thank you my poet friend. You have written a true masterpiece on love and searching for it. Enjoyed Michael

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 4:14:00 PM

    Audonus you stole my breath with this piece, it was so beautiful and touching, honest and loving. This is a truly great piece, a rare jewel. Your introduction was stunning, and your ending touching. The middle was a wonderful journey into beauty. I thank you for your wonderful comments they brighten my day as always. I loved your idea with Terabithia, alluding to the book? Brilliant work as always! Great use of vocabulary by the way! Always I wish you well! --Madison

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 7:46:00 AM

    this is very fine writing indeed...

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 7:36:00 AM

    Good day, Audonus! well this poem so touches my soul. I love it and it is going to my favorite. I hope one day to redefine the definition on soul mate.. oi! having trouble with mine.. enjoyed your poem,..p.d.

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 4:43:00 AM

    God speed to you in your quest. Audonus

  1. Date: 12/2/2010 3:37:00 AM

    good luck, you'll find a nice gal