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I fell in like with you

Inspired by one of my favorite bands, Rise Against, and the song is called,
“Ever-changing” (Acoustic). Please listen to this song if you don’t know of it. It’s raw &
powerful.

“Have you ever been a part of something? That you thought would never end. But then, of
course, it did.” –Rise Against

“I fell in ‘Like’ with you”

With her smile
I melted unto oblivion’s redemption
Candy coated perceptions, windows’ gap
Seeping brilliance refreshment

Uncertainty resolution, polished
Absorbed into closeness sun
Yet these eyes still…see
Butterflies taking notice, missing you…as you stood in front of me

Strong, yet soft legs
Foundation of my face to rest upon
Scars…fading
A cremated sin 

Yet, elongated moments of silence
Created abruption’s new face

The face of change
When she turned to me and said
“I’m not sure, anymore”

Emotional lullaby, rocking me to sleep
New battles with spectral flashback
Trying to get under my skin, a drunken tick facing demise

Phoenix’s sunrise, rejuvenating my recycled defenses
Yet, today, these rays just aren’t bright enough to burn sadness away

And with these sounds of storm clouds & Fall on horizon’s breath
These grounds are so familiar, yet bittersweet
This heart doesn’t want to be enlightened by karma today

It wants to be held for how it shines now

Denied…distance wins again today
Slavery whipped punishments in miles and blocks
This must end

Because I try to keep lines open to get a call from you
Yet all I hear are booty calls with busy signals

And yet something has kept me here too long
But can they leave me, if I’m already gone?

Something has kept me here too long
Karma’s laughter

But, through it all, I will shine

…

How I wish my mere presence can bring joy’s tear to her eye

Sadly though, now, the lines are drawn
Yet I wonder if this feeling is gone
Have the best parts of this…come and gone?

…

Maybe I’ll never know the truth

Perhaps she was misguided by jealousy’s deprivation
Deteriorating heart’s splendor

While I fell in “like” with her

Perhaps “Better Man 2.0” appeared from Cloud 9’s fallacy

While I fell in “like” with her

Perhaps
She held onto the past

As I, drawn to waterfall’s edge
Allowed myself

To let go…and F
A
L
L

© Drake J. Eszes
“We adore those who hurt us. Yet, we hurt those who adore us.” -Anonymous

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  1. Date: 5/20/2013 10:42:00 PM

    ... but we ran AWAAAYYY HEY!... now all my friends are gone! Maybe we've outgrown all the things that we once loved"... heck yes, another Rise Against fan! Anyway... onto the poem. I'll be honest, I'm not a typical fan of extremely abstract descriptions... but there's something about the way you write that makes me halfway change my mind about it. There seems to a be a cold neutrality in relationships these days... People settling for "like" instead of "love"... adding you to my fave poets list!

    Eszes Avatar Drake Eszes Date: 5/20/2013 10:52:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    YES!!!!!!!!! A beautiful thing! Yes, there is a much greater distorted definition between like & love. Same thing with "friendship" and just "knowing somebody". Many, many thanks, Tim!!!!!
  1. Date: 9/15/2011 1:32:00 PM

    Mesmerizing words that flow from your pen like water. Takes the reader deep into your mind where the dreamlike sequence is an enchanting experience.

  1. Date: 5/1/2011 7:49:00 AM

    Hi Dalila, yes something along those lines. You just started this month? Spectacular! Thank you for coming by here. :)

  1. Date: 4/30/2011 10:00:00 PM

    Dear Drake, Thank you on your comment of my poem: OF LOVE. It was inspired behind by someone who adores me. Now on this poem of yours, it seems you and your love separated and ended up not liking each other. I like the narrative-like part of your poem. Thank you again for reading my poems. I just started composing poems this April and I am totally immersed in it. Dalila

  1. Date: 3/15/2011 5:54:00 AM

    Thank you kindly Carol!

  1. Date: 3/15/2011 5:51:00 AM

    Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Drake. Have a wonderful week and may you have baskets full of inspiration come your way. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/13/2011 5:07:00 PM

    Hi Karen & Linda, thank you both so very much!!! I had no idea until just now. Awesome!!! :)

  1. Date: 3/13/2011 5:03:00 PM

    Congrats Drake on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. wonderful words to share with us all my friend with luv.. impressive...

  1. Date: 3/10/2011 6:37:00 PM

    I like reading your poems gives me a different look at everyone's creativity

  1. Date: 2/28/2011 1:33:00 PM

    Yes, for sure...thank you so much for stopping by Celene. I think your name is awesome, by the way.

  1. Date: 2/28/2011 12:53:00 PM

    Sweet,romantic,yet so sad. .the letting go so hard. .enjoyed reading your poem,it stirs the soul and heart. .C.C

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 5:47:00 PM

    @ P.D., lol that's cute. But, I was approaching it differently. A little more innocently, I guess is the word for it. Either way, I wanted to a walk a different path with this. I think it worked. =) Thank you so much!!! @ Nette, not for a contest. Just another something from the heart. =) Yes, every rose does...thank you kindly!

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 3:37:00 PM

    I'm sorry but i smiled at the thought,, you can not come out and say it,,lol,, (( I FELL IN LOVE WITH YOU )) your poem was awesome,..miss p.d.

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 8:46:00 AM

    piercingly beautiful with images that pushes and pull.. roses, like love, have thorns.. unique from as well, drake... if this is for a contest, much luck to you! warmest, nette

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 7:55:00 AM

    @ Michael, yes please do. But, be sure it's the Acoustical version...that's the epic version. Thank you kindly! =) @ Sara, neither have I. But the fact I thought of it...I just had to run with it. I was delighted to read it. It was damn good. Thank you very much for stopping by here. @ Dr. Ram, hard-hitting song isn't it? Thank you so much sir!

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 6:22:00 AM

    I will check out the song , and this write is very very good....so ejoyed....Michael

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 5:15:00 AM

    Welcome to soup...Never heard of a drunken tick..I was delighted that you stopped by to comment on my Haiku..Sara

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 4:59:00 AM

    I very much the song, Drake and nice adage at the end,

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 4:25:00 AM

    I highly recommend checking it out on Youtube or just buying the track. It's a heart-breaking but eye-opening piece. Thank you so much, Wilma! Yeah, I'm diggin' the quote too. =)

  1. Date: 11/28/2010 4:22:00 AM

    Drake, I never heard this song before but I really enjoyed your write.. The quote at the end are a favourite of mine, I have it at work near my desk. ;-)