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The Shadow of Me

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The Shadow of Me

It was a long time ago, in another age
Where the shifting of the wind
Knew where I began
A place so far away, 
Somewhere distant, in childhood country
Before the fog had set in,
Before time lost all trace of me

Where have they gone?
Those merry dancers with whom I played?
When we were queens of the carnival, kings of the parade?
Before being dethroned to mid-life corners
Hearing the music, without playing the drums
They tell me to take this age with grace
Yet everywhere I turn, is young

I'm still the same, I have not changed
I lived a time where love was wild and thoughts were too
With high regard, when eyes were glued
Now inside I'm torn in two...the old and the new
Trapped between this nowhere place
Myself and someone else
Until each barrier becomes a bridge...
Have I been shaped too square by passing years, to fit in circle's place?

My memory recalls those beautiful tomorrows
Now long buried in yesterday's ground
There are other ways to measure time
Besides growing older and graying hair
Recorded music fills the room
Left playing from an earlier time
When October skies showed fading traces
Of empty days and sad old faces
The "others" of whom I had no fear

Now those shadowed remnants from my past
Are stalking at my heels
Will somebody care to ask?   Will anyone need my mind?
Will they patronize, or just be kind?
Care enough, make me useful, give me value, call me beautiful?....
Not yet the age I'll someday be
Still, I feel the sting of losing me
How I ache for all those love songs
How I ache for someone needing, someone pleading...
For advice....for my worth, for an answer, will they want me?
How it haunts me.....Will they see me?
Touching me....reminding me of who I am................not just who I was...


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  1. Date: 8/22/2012 12:26:00 PM
    Oh, this is marvelous! my fav. line- Still, I feel the sting of losing me- I know that feeling intimately. Congrats on your well deserved win! :) Tanya

  1. Date: 8/21/2012 7:55:00 PM
    just beautiful. It reminds me of my Mom, brings tears to my eyes. I love the method of your write. Lovely. Lee

  1. Date: 8/21/2012 7:10:00 AM
    Congratulations on your well deserved win Carrie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/19/2012 2:03:00 AM
    Carrie congrats on your win, a good tale of age coming up fast...David

  1. Date: 8/18/2012 11:37:00 AM
    This expresses it perfectly. We are the same but different because of how we are preceived and because of our health and bodies slowing us down. We know we are older and wiser... Others just stop seeing us because we are older.

  1. Date: 8/18/2012 4:06:00 AM
    This said it so well: Will someone still need me? Congratulations on your win, Carrie. Love, Suzette

  1. Date: 8/18/2012 12:56:00 AM
    Well done, Carrie, .....another of your "specials"! this is my kind of poetry....all sorts of ideas carefully woven in a tapestry of memories.....so many excellent pieces of artsitry, but i especially like verses 1 2 and 4...perhaps the most telling words are "memory recalls those beautiful tomorrows" showing the condensation of time into an instant, just like memory actually works ........thanks for writing this it was a pleasure to read .....best w Syd

  1. Date: 8/17/2012 11:18:00 PM
    This is wonderful Carrie. My number one pick. You said it so beautifully. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 8/17/2012 9:10:00 PM
    Yes, ma'am, I do believe they will and do and have... even this edgy rabble-rouser recognizes the beauty of your.... staid,somewhat scarred, stalwart, sweet, sound and so,,, I say keep on Sayin' it Sistah! Namaste !N

  1. Date: 3/24/2012 8:20:00 AM
    feels like a hesitant and uncertain soul being exposed to the light and the surprising thing is how similar it is to my own, and quite probably to many other people here on the soup......well written and very touching ..... congratulations indeed Carrie

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 8:30:00 PM
    ........... ................ ............Im clapping! ........................... ........................... ........................ Still clapping ........... ............................... ........................................ : )

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    Date: 3/23/2012 8:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Congratulations, my dear Number One! A deserved First Place; this poem is "really" wonderful! ; ) Ruben.
  1. Date: 3/23/2012 5:07:00 PM
    congrats on your 1st place win; a very well written piece, superbly crafted, as all your poems are :-)

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 12:57:00 PM
    Congratulations on your placement in Chris' "Let The Masks Fall" contest Carrie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 10:27:00 AM
    wow!!!!!!!! superlative..enjoyed the write very much. congrats on the top placement in the contest........~sashi

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 9:03:00 AM
    congrats on your win from my wife. Ron. thank you for your nice comment to her.

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 8:58:00 AM
    Wow! Very nice poem, Carrie. I especially enjoyed the rhyme you put into this one. Congratulations on your first place win in Chris' contest. hugs, Catie :)

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 6:24:00 AM
    This says one thing in many but forgets something as well, many look upon you and envy your age, most look upon you and envy your mind, and all look upon you and envy your poetry!!

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 3:24:00 AM
    this really is a stunning poem, so profound, so much feeling, a wonderful wonderful emotional poem. congrats harry

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 3:16:00 AM
    This is another poem that wowed me :)! I love the ponderings that you give here and so many memorable lines then how you ended this just made me wonder myself-- This is yet another beautifully written piece by you, Carrie! Super congrats on your top place win :D! So happy to see this on top! Hugs to you!!

  1. Date: 3/23/2012 1:45:00 AM
    This is so beautifully written and holds so much meaning...congratulations on your win!

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