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Lunch Exile

I'm in agony!
As the energy drains out!
Cruelest lunch, arrive!

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  1. Date: 2/1/2011 7:08:00 AM

    LOL very funny one here but not a haiku...it could kinda be a senyru...haiku form used NO capitalization or punctuation/ no title and is about nature, like a snapshot of a beauty so intense it's prayer like..to make this more senryu like you would write...gut's agony/the rumble of drained energy/lunch bell rings [So glad to hear from your island country I must google where you are!! WELCOME!] Light & love

  1. Date: 10/27/2010 8:21:00 AM

    Interesting and thoughtful haiku with nice images, Dominic

  1. Date: 10/26/2010 7:39:00 PM

    Welcome to Poetry Soup.. enjoyed reading your poetry tonight with its creative theme.. interesting Haiku which is usually about Nature .. hope u check out the contest page offered to new members ... good luck with luv..