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Random thoughts **51** Trois Par Huit--Tanka--Rondel

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Random thoughts **51** Trois Par Huit--Tanka--Rondel

Trois Par Huit--Tanka--Rondel

**A Love In Transition**


My mission,
this love in transition.
Started, a platonic love as friends.

It was not my intent, no more can I pretend.
These impending changes, remissed as I contend.
The muse of my latest poetry,

potent, our chemistry.
Hopefully!!


Am I a villain,
a wolf cloaked in sheep clothing
causing this friction?
Me ignoring these feelings
is treacherous to my heart.


This love that is in transition,
I'm incomplete and must not retreat.
Should I stay this course or flee,
is she real or a ghostly apparition.

Captivated by this rendition, her disposition,
intelligent and sweet.
This love that is in transition,
I'm incomplete and must not retreat.

Her dude is no competition
immature and full of insecurities,
quickly becoming obsolete.
One, is soon our juxtaposition,
this love that is in transition...

*** This poem is an example for my newest contest: Trois Par Huit---Tanka----Rondel***

Jared Pickett
9/28/2010
Asavvy1

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  1. Date: 3/5/2014 5:16:00 PM

    Jared, I'm looking forward, in using this form again in the future. You're a great teacher. SKAt

    Pickett Avatar Jared Pickett Date: 3/6/2014 12:36:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    I am as well, thank you for giving me the opportunity to collaborate with you, It was fun!Asavvy1
  1. Date: 11/16/2010 7:29:00 AM

    Hey Mr. J. hope all is well with u.. having fun .. yes.. luving life ..yes.. writing poems ..yes.. its all good then..luv... reading lots of entries for your current contest luv.. everyone chose something a little different but I went for the ODE form.. so did a few other poets.. and they are all great entries luv.. good luck with this one.. it was delightful.. and challenging to the "Sweetheart" ..luv..ya.. miss ya.. soup mail me.. luv..

    A  Avatar SKAT A Date: 3/5/2014 4:54:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    luv you my BFF.... SKAT
  1. Date: 11/14/2010 1:15:00 AM

    Jared, I enjoyed using this Trois Par Huit---Tanka----Rondel form that you have created. It seemed to bond thoughts together in an interesting and unusual way. I enjoyed your contest. Sincerely, Dane Ann

  1. Date: 11/7/2010 7:27:00 PM

    Hey, I am glad to see your example(after the fact) It's really cool and I love your new way of combining three forms. What a great challenge it was. LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 11/7/2010 7:08:00 AM

    Thankxxx darlin' for my big win in your hard contest... and I mean hard in the nicest way ..haha.. always up for a great challenge and u do provide them luv... hope u are having a great Fall though it feels like Winter to the "Sweetheart" ..brrr..sorry about your Broncos... maybe u should change teams and give my GMen a go..luv..haha..only kidding.. I know u are a die hard football loyalist..luv.. well only 10 games left to play.. anything can happen.. enjoy luv..

  1. Date: 11/7/2010 4:56:00 AM

    Interesting write..Sara

  1. Date: 10/19/2010 8:52:00 PM

    Mr. JP I've never commented on this poem before because I couldn't find words good enough to tell you have great it is...And YES I'm ready for all those things you commented on my poem. Thank you for the nice comments. You are my favorite poet and always will be. ILY Always. Love Scarlett

  1. Date: 10/15/2010 10:09:00 AM

    Man, u R brilliant, my nig! Hot poem- I read Scarlett's "Rapturous Love" u got your hands full bruh- That's what's up! ;) Peace and love to ya, Jimmy

  1. Date: 10/15/2010 9:24:00 AM

    this is a really awesome example for your contest, Jared, and it's a superb contest idea you've got going on!!

  1. Date: 10/14/2010 8:43:00 AM

    Soup Mail

  1. Date: 9/29/2010 5:56:00 PM

    Thanks a lot, Jared, for this example, what a great job you've done with this challenging form. I have revised and corrected my entry.... I had that Rondel all wrong, I discovered....so hopefully I've got it corrected. I am a work in progress...ha ha...but contests like this one, are helping me hone my skills!! (Still keeping my fingers crossed that I did it right this time!! but thanks for the help!!) :) Carrie

  1. Date: 9/28/2010 5:18:00 PM

    enjoyed reading your works... sounds like love in motion!

  1. Date: 9/28/2010 1:36:00 PM

    Thanks so much for giving this example, Jared. I enjoyed the poem and copied it into Word, placing it side by side with my entry. I think I did it right and really appreciate having this fine poem as a reference for comparison. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 9/28/2010 1:05:00 PM

    Well I think I shall give u an A PLUS ..this is super duper wonderful and meaningful and wake up call savvy to the ASavvy 1... luv luv luv it ..luv.. thankxxx for the example .. am sure my entry is correct ...and hot hot hot as my comments have told me ... so enjoy.. guess thing worthwhile ARE worth waiting for ..line your lines luv.. enjoyed ..now where is my Ron hiding? its hot in here.. that junxtaposition got me..hahahaha