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"Rise Agaisn't God"

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"Rise Agaisn't God"

By this juice
It hurts us all
God made us see
See the light never bloomed
No burying for us
Totally insane
After so many years
Nothing to see beyond this mountain
Sooner 
Later
Falls same
Not a single shot
Not further from the sky
Just one step to say it out loud

Hate us all
Make us hate
See us hate
Feel us hate
We all hate equal
Better take our side
For the time you fear
We will rule this land

Know we all died
Feel us grasp you softly
Make me see how far you and i
Were we headed
A thousand years ago
Not a chance
No sky 
No hell
You see me same ways
There's no were to run
We kings deserve your sou
We kings better hide from him
God made us
God did this
But why we scream at god hate us
For then to place blame
I see you burn
A hell of ice
I make it burn
You and i will whisper the wind
I promise we deserve the world in half

Hate us all
Make us hate
See us hate
Feel us hate
We all hate equal
Better take our side
For the time you fear
We will rule this land

Mean while we grasp our faces
Mean while you sit to watch us burn
I deserve better life
We all do
I walk fields of blood
An ocean to see
But a fall of the cloud
Didn't quite held the truth
We deserve a soul
An wide full chest
I promise darling we will burn
But i fall same way
Same hole
My face made a sin
I hate this
I hate him
I hated all of this
Now i live for this
I mourn the sky a savior
Oh god what have we all done

Hate us all
Make us hate
See us hate
Feel us hate
We all hate equal
Better take our side
For the time you fear
We will rule this land
A price to pay
Will not grow
I sober up slow
A fate never escaped
An inferno to feel
Help us all
Help us hate
We all deserve the pain you died with
A life
A savior
Strike us all
Alive we all burn
Never dying
We mourn it
Now we scream it.

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  1. Date: 9/26/2010 8:21:00 AM
    It seems this is a very bleak outlook on life, filled with despair, Derek. There are times when I feel sad and wonder, "Why am I here? Only to endure pain?" Perhaps this is how you were feeling when you posted this poem. I hope you are feeling more upbeat now, my friend. These dismal times usually pass -- at least that's what I keep telling myself. Let's make a deal -- I'll hang on to hope if you will. Okay? Love, Carolyn

    Ortiz Avatar Derek Ortiz
    Date: 3/1/2014 6:51:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    It has been years since you commented this and tonight I decided to read my writings again. Thank you for some empathy and kindness, and just for you to know I will hang on hope while you continue to it as well.
  1. Date: 9/25/2010 11:55:00 PM
    Sounds scary.

  1. Date: 9/25/2010 7:38:00 PM
    Nice poem. Love Scarlett