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Pilot envy

Envy a pilot
     escape gravity's clutches
          for oceans of air.

Manufactured bird
     raucous call and rigid wing,
          momentary flight.

A featherless dance
     in the shadow of a cloud,
          elusive freedom!


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  1. Date: 9/10/2010 5:15:00 AM

    Enjoyed the read of your awesome Haikus, Wayne! Have a great weekend and thank you for commenting "The Rose"...Gert

  1. Date: 9/9/2010 5:41:00 PM

    I loved these two images: oceans of air/and featherless dance! Awesome. LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 9/8/2010 10:33:00 PM

    Some would argue that this is a senryu, but the line between the haiku and senryu are blurred by the contemporary haiku movement. That aside, I think this is a great piece. At first I thought I liked only the 3rd tier, but after further reading, I'm enjoying the whole thing.

  1. Date: 9/7/2010 7:56:00 PM

    I agree with Rick, the imagery is excellent. Who knew piloting a plane could be so freeing? You said so much using a fairly limiting form, nicely done!

  1. Date: 9/7/2010 7:18:00 PM

    Simply love the first and third of this triple~great imagery~Perfect~Enjoyed~Rick