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That night

That night I saw an angel smile at me,
I never thought that such things would even be.

I thought there are only ghosts moving around,
In the air making strange sound.

A smile lit on my face,
When an angel stood there with grace.

I wondered when an angel came to my room,
With the face that bloomed.

I couldn't close my eyes,
As it was as cold as ice.

And so I remember that night when an angel smiled at me,
And I never thought that such things would even be.

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  1. Date: 3/1/2013 12:07:00 AM

    If this your first poem written, then I would have to say that it is a good attempt. I've read it through a few times before offering this critique. I have to wonder why the angel appeared to you. Was there a message of comfort? If so, why did you need it? Was there a message of warning? What did the angel look like? There are so many more things that you can do to add substance to an otherwise good poem. This is the first poem of yours that I've read. I will read more to see your progression.

  1. Date: 2/15/2013 6:44:00 AM

    this poem is nice, so sweet :)mwell done

    khan Avatar asma khan Date: 2/16/2013 4:26:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    this was my first poem. thank you wade! :)
  1. Date: 6/21/2010 1:40:00 PM

    great imagination and such sweet innocence.

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 4:06:00 PM

    Oh this is lovelly ..Too see angel would be something hey x sarah x

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 11:08:00 AM

    such a lovely write very beautiful, enjoyed the read...P.D.

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 6:26:00 AM

    Nice rhyming gives rhythm to the poem. Can be enjoyed much more if one reads aloud. nice one

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 6:25:00 AM

    Welcome to Poetry Soup Family .. so enjoyed your creative write tonight.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 6:11:00 AM

    simple yet this poem evoke a warm emotion to my soul...and I love the effect,,,thanks for sharing...