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.:Awaiting Dawn:.:Enigma:. Second Half

The Small Girl Felt a Rush. .and did so out of Her Room,
She Stopped in Her Tracks Once She saw Her at a Distance,
By the Front Door, and with the Fearful Tone Her Father
Had Only Minutes Past. .
She Questioned Her of Where She was going.
This Caused a Tear to Fall from Her Mother’s Eyes. .
Hearing such Fear in Her Daughter’s Voice,
Though She would Cease them as much as She could Bear. .
And with the Truth She has Always Told Her of,
She would say that She was Sick Today,
The One’s who Knew how to Mend were Awaiting on Her Arrival. .
So it was a must that Her Father Stay Home with Her Tonight.
She Lead closer to where Her Mother was.
At the Sight of this, She Lowered Herself onto Her Knees
The Moment before Her Daughter Embraced Her. .Not Letting go.
She would Say it was Unsafe to go Alone,
Although She Insisted that She would be Fine.
The Small Girl Believed in Her. .but with One Last Request. .
She Wished for Her to Promise that She will be back by Dawn.
Her Father would watch them from a Distance.
She Lost Rein in on Her Tears now. .Even so,
She Held to that Promise. . Devoid of any Doubt,
From the Great Hope Her Daughter Bestowed Her with. .
She Glanced Once more at Her. .Followed by Her Father.
Then Slowly Breaking their Embrace. .with no Desire to.
She Turned away. .Passing through the Door. .
Disappearing Within the Twilight Rain.
The Small Girl Stood in that Place, 
Where they watched Her Depart. .
She Felt Her Father. .Whisper these Strong Words to Her. .
Telling Her that He will make sure all would be okay,
Despite what this Journey had Created for them.
Knowing that He would Never Cease to Tell Her of this,
She would Say to Him in Return. .
That She would be back by Sunrise. .As She Promised.
Her Father Held onto Her. .without another Word.
In Time that Felt of Days on No End,
The Small Girl Awoke by the Sound of a Phone’s Call. .
And Ambled out of Her Room, Expecting to See Her Mother. .
Alongside Her Father. .But the Only Figure She saw
Was of Him. .with the Phone Placed Down on His lap,
In Unwanted Distraught, All the more the Moment
He saw His Daughter there. .
Staring His Way. .Waiting for Him to Speak. .
But Instead. .There was a Shuddering Silence. .
Her Mother was not there by Dawn. .
But She was Gone. .by Dawn. . . .

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  1. Date: 6/12/2010 3:28:00 AM

    Wow. This write of yours gave me chills, Lynette...wow. Thank you for sharing, I can;t help but feel so sad for that little girl, such a moving write...

  1. Date: 6/10/2010 10:36:00 PM

    Elegantly written, of a little girls hope that wasn't to be. Definitely a page turner

  1. Date: 6/8/2010 8:22:00 PM

    Lynette your sweet comments always makes me smile and after my eye surgery today I surely needed some smiles and u provided.. am doing fine ..only allowed one hour on comp tonight ...more tomorrow... but big thankxxx for always reading my poetry .. appreciate a sweet heart from this "Sweetheart"...

  1. Date: 6/6/2010 6:42:00 AM

    Tears flow as I read this second half.. so touching ..the picture u paint in words is dramatic ...sensitive.. alluring.. emotional.. and so creative.. if this is a true story ..even more so ..from an experience everlasting Lynette.. life is never the same after MOM is gone.. mine left me Thanksgiving Day last year and it continually hurts.. my best to u sweetie if a true story.. luv.. Linda-Marie.

  1. Date: 6/4/2010 3:48:00 PM

    Very nicely penned!!

  1. Date: 6/3/2010 1:26:00 PM

    HI, there LYnette. Just saw you were here. How is the day treating you?

  1. Date: 6/2/2010 12:03:00 AM

    ....What a true sorrow dear!! I wonder if this is a true story? Although, sadly within this life, this world, this story is repeated everyday, somewhere....Smile, You, told its bittersweetness very well indeed, "Precious & Gifted, Lynette Cachere!!" ~ Smile, You do very well within Your narrative prose!! And this one flowed extremely well dear! "Wonderful Job, To A Sad Tale!!" ~ "My Love & Warmth Always To You Precious Lady," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very Beautiful Day Dear," Bye!:)

  1. Date: 6/1/2010 7:41:00 PM

    Yes, like PD says, this is a goose bumps ending. We can sense all along the forboding in your poem, LYnette. Is there to be more so that we can know the full story? Loved your last two lines, very powerful.LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 5/31/2010 4:43:00 PM

    Yikes goose bumps at the end. girl you tormented me on this one. Sad poor child her mother could not keep her promise. This is sad for me before my mother passed, I whispeared in her ear to stick around for her favorite grandsons B-day. She was already gone. For some reason she sticked around for my request. By mid morning which was still dawn she was gone. In my heart I felt as if she stuck around just for me. Now she has a grand son who celbrates his B-day the same day she passed away,..p..d

  1. Date: 5/31/2010 3:58:00 AM

    total loss; devastating!

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 8:15:00 PM

    Yes my dear I told myself I would come back to this 1. Today and tomorrow, I am trying 2 get my son 2 come back 2 the soup. He is out of school now. 3 months of summer. Poor little guy is bearly in the 10th grade.Wish he was out maybe he could help with the bills. lol. He needs to start writing more he has an imagination that can take him anywhere. Like yourself. Except he thinks odd and strange. Than again so do I.: ) He needs 2 try 1 of these heart felt poems.I will B back 2 comment later,SKAT

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 6:30:00 PM

    A very sad touching Narrative, Lynette. Well written also, keep the good works rolling Dear. Thank you also for your gracious comment today. Agape, Moses

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 5:00:00 PM

    A great story that you have penned in this one..Sad though...Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work "Down By The Wet Lands"...This was based on some thoughts about mostly my mother but also of my husband's mother and of myself...Sara

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 4:15:00 PM

    HEART TOUCHING WRITE, ENJOYED

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 3:36:00 PM

    Your narrative brought tears to my eyes, Lynette. Such a sad story. The mother had to make a promise she knew she couldn't keep so her daughter wouldn't worry. A true portrayal of love that will never die, just transcend to the spiritual world. Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 3:11:00 PM

    Heartwrenching, write, Lynette! well-written, but so very sad...but this is reality in our imperfect world. Gifted poet, you are Lynette..at such a young age and you're this good...you are going to go far!! Love, Audrey

  1. Date: 5/30/2010 2:30:00 PM

    Ive read the first part.All i have to say is this actually teared me up.The vivid Description you put into words,it just made me imagine it all.The narrative is beyond skills,and i have to congratulate you on this one.Many more praises to come from me,as i start reading more of your stuff.THUMBS UP AND A 7@.@ (Y)