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Naked before me

I see you with her
and I know from your eyes
your vision whirled
You hold her hand
and when our gaze met
you unclasp it
No need to hide honey
I know we expired
I thought at first
Time would make us wine
But it just turned us into
a fluid in the mouth
Fermented from sleep
sour, smelly, unswallowable
Your ways of loving
were exposed before me
When our gaze locked,
Don't bow your head yet-
I'm still recollecting it
How sweet you love
Rather how sweet you lie?
The way you thawed my heart
by the heat of your tongue
and now I prove
that tongue's no better than a snake's
and Oh! how sensational you love
You always sent me screaming
through the night
But don't be ashamed honey
if your skill is naked before me
Cause I know for certain
That the lady whom you're with
Will fall to no better than my fate.

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  1. Date: 10/17/2010 8:49:00 PM

    Hmmm, am I getting this right? the lady left you for another woman? Very interesting this one!! I love how unique some of your lines come off, such as the way you describe time turning you both into a nasty fluid instead of wine! I hope I can still find at least one other poem of yours I have not read yet! this one was great. Andrea

  1. Date: 7/22/2010 1:49:00 PM

    Ow now i see,i have read this already,oops :)sooory!

  1. Date: 7/22/2010 1:47:00 PM

    Interesting!missed this one!CELENE!

  1. Date: 6/25/2010 11:26:00 AM

    Not what I expected when I read the title, but what a fun way to portray a betrayer. I enjoyed it very much. Sasha

  1. Date: 6/22/2010 1:15:00 PM

    stopping by to say thank you for your comment, on my given slam, have anice one,..p.d.

  1. Date: 6/21/2010 12:17:00 AM

    ah the complications of love... great write though.

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 7:26:00 AM

    Betrayal!touching deep poem Juan!Celene

  1. Date: 6/19/2010 5:59:00 AM

    Another great write... keep them comming my friend.... Michael

  1. Date: 5/5/2010 10:37:00 PM

    thanks for all your comments, you are too kind thanks for the support on my poems,..p.d.

  1. Date: 5/1/2010 5:36:00 AM

    this is quite the piece to share with someone, when they need to understand how it is,..p.d.

  1. Date: 4/30/2010 10:00:00 PM

    such strong words for a betrayed heart. Sends a powerful meaning to the heart. -Stacie

  1. Date: 4/27/2010 9:44:00 PM

    Enjoyed reading this poem. Powerful imagery to back up the whole premise. Well done. Chris.