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Below is the poem entitled Surprise which was written by poet Jay Smith. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Surprise

What if the water,
Fell apart then caught fire,
And the ashes burned scars in our skin?
When the wind took away,
The pain we had gained,
Would we remember how it felt to be burned?
Would we remember how it felt for the wind to give us relief?
Or would we wonder why it happened in the first place?

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  1. Date: 3/2/2010 8:51:00 AM

    great piece here and very thought provoking, i loved it. Jo

  1. Date: 9/30/2009 1:41:00 PM

    This poem is based on the idea that everybody's perception is different. This poem asks what someone would focus on if a life-changing event unexpectedly happened. I would love some feedback please. .::James::.

  1. Date: 9/29/2009 4:21:00 AM

    I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup James. I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 9/28/2009 3:23:00 PM

    Different idea here. Keep writing. Sara