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Expire the Eye Walker

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Expire the Eye Walker

.                                   Expire the Eye Walker

                    Creeping amongst the lash of nights eye = 9
                    He ignores around it, making dry = 9

                         Pulling the lids back with both fists = 8
                         As he skids across our eyes mist   = 8

                           He causes bursts of replay = 7
                           Credible to some, at day = 7

                              Yet fixated are we = 6
                              On the sand we can’t see = 6

                                Annoying to some = 5
                                We’ll pick till it comes = 5

                                  Love at a glance = 4
                                  Sandman’s romance = 4

                                     Most review = 3
                                     His walk through = 3

                                         To find = 2
                                         He’s blind = 2

                                            Grain =1
                                            Brained =1


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                                This is a “Mock Bowler” poem

                                                  Each 
                                           stanza reduces
                                    syllable count beginning
                                with nine and ending with one
                             The form “Mock Bowler”, created
                             by Sandra Hudson, resembles the
                              pins at the end of a bowling lane
                                  Each two-line stanza has the
                                    same syllable count and  
                                     stanzas must rhyme
                                             last words




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  1. Date: 12/19/2011 11:43:00 AM
    Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you and yours Sandra. Love and blessings, Carol

  1. Date: 8/27/2009 4:57:00 PM
    creative! jhlovingiii

  1. Date: 8/14/2009 11:36:00 AM
    I'm going to try to write one of this! Creative, interesting...I like it! You're so talented, Sandra! Ruben.

  1. Date: 8/1/2009 8:34:00 AM
    Looks as if I get to tap you, Kristy and I didn't see that James Fraser had done a duo already (our bad) so we think you and Sami would write an EXCELLENT duo together. Have fun......Aleera

  1. Date: 7/25/2009 8:04:00 AM
    Hey, Alexandra, this is an awesome new verse form! Love the syllable structure and the way you made each pair of lines rhyme. Great work! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 7/23/2009 6:30:00 PM
    very interesting,Sandra, your own creation? I've had you mixed up with some one else, I'll explain to you on soup mail! God bless Moses

  1. Date: 7/23/2009 6:12:00 PM
    Soup Mail!!!!!....Aleera

  1. Date: 7/23/2009 8:08:00 AM
    Very interesting, I have never heard of that before. Its great though....Aleera

  1. Date: 7/23/2009 6:45:00 AM
    Very clever, Sandra....and an excellent job here!! You have wowed us!!

  1. Date: 7/22/2009 7:46:00 PM
    very creative Sandra! actually the truth I'm accepting today is that I've got "poets melacholy" jimmy

  1. Date: 7/22/2009 7:44:00 PM
    this is a very interesting form. i like it. check out some of my poems