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You kill with Your Hate

**You name them your blood
**You fight side by side
**Against the “Enemy”:
**The different in sight

Your soldiers against soldiers
And Yet
You’re all alike
Both brothers from Adam and Eve

Alive you’ll never come close to one another
But you’re friends die side by side

You both heal but hate
You both suffer in and out of battlefields
You're all good
But you've all been call bad
You're suppose to be fighting the system
But the system is beating you up
It's gotten you in a Sibling Rivarly




We start with name callings:
Latino chickens
American slave driver
Arab terrorists
African dust
--Convicts--

Then it's fist fights:
I got a slap
I got a punch
I got a kick
I’ve gone to jump you
--& Pretty soon a tornado--

And we died with weapons:
I’ve got a rope
I’ve got a brass knuckle
I’ve got a knife
I’ve got a gun
--I’ve got a bomb--

Maybe, it's time you understand
That you didn’t kill him 
With your guns or knives
You killed him with your hate

**You name them your blood
**You died side by side
**Against “Your brothers”
**The same inside



(For the Sibling Rivalary Contest)

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  1. Date: 8/17/2009 6:31:00 PM

    Open discussions and universal acceptance would end all that. Excellent write. Vince

  1. Date: 8/14/2009 3:43:00 PM

    A different slant well done. Congratulations on your win. Joyce

  1. Date: 8/14/2009 2:49:00 PM

    So your wonderful writing won in Debra's contest as well !! Thank you for sharing your gift with us sajdah!!

  1. Date: 8/14/2009 8:09:00 AM

    Congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest Sajdah. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/14/2009 6:17:00 AM

    Congratulations on your placement. TL

  1. Date: 8/13/2009 4:37:00 PM

    This poem is a winner!! It can win in any Contest! Congratulations, Sajdah! Ruben.

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 3:43:00 PM

    Very clever play on words here, Sajdah!! Its strange to call warriors "brothers" or those in the ghetto who shoot each other over dope but call each other "brother" ... great write you've done here and congratulations on your win in Nathan's contest!!

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 8:59:00 AM

    This is so original and thoughtful. congrats on your success in the contest. BG

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 8:10:00 AM

    A great poem. And a lesson. Thanks. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 6:47:00 AM

    A powerful poem for Nathan's contest. Great writing! Congratulations!!~ Carrie

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 3:25:00 AM

    Congratulations for your win in Nathan's contest Sajdah . Love, Carol

  1. Date: 8/4/2009 2:25:00 AM

    Congratulations on a Honorable Mention in my contest! Nate.

  1. Date: 7/9/2009 3:43:00 AM

    it's a shame. love, hate, happiness, sadness and all the colors of emotions are all cut from the same cloth. to get ride of one is to lesson the others.

  1. Date: 7/2/2009 4:13:00 PM

    A-MAY-ZING!! Lovie yOUve Done It aGain!! Powerful Write. Your Words Speak Voulumns. God Now Where The Fukk Is That Camera. Lol Ill ExplAin My F-ed Up Writing Latter.

  1. Date: 7/1/2009 6:49:00 PM

    God's creation trivialized by man. Well said...

  1. Date: 7/1/2009 3:11:00 AM

    great entry! you are competition! Best of luck!-AA

  1. Date: 7/1/2009 1:17:00 AM

    Powerful and compelling best of luck in the contest...Raul

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 8:12:00 PM

    I was thinking about writing a poem "about" this idea, my friend. You did it Brilliantly. Excellent piece: its concept, its word use, and its awesome title! It goes to my favs., Sajdah. I'm not alone! Good job. Ruben.

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 12:17:00 PM

    thanks for supporting my contest. Nate

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 11:41:00 AM

    Bravo, the moral of this being there is no sweetness in war or revenge... Your words after all apply to both... Even in War it can be one another we are pitted against to fight against the opinions of greed....and still we do not learn what History teaches time and again!

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 9:26:00 AM

    Your soldiers against soldiers And Yet You’re all alike Both brothers from Adam and Eve that line had me hooked to the screen. tops thums up hands down. your going under my fav poet. ypu can win the respect of many poets with lines like that. keep up the good work

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 9:22:00 AM

    "You both heal but hate / You both suffer in and out of battlefields." Creative description of trauma here. Insightful idea. We are all related. The wars of the world are like sibling rivalries. We continually fight amongst ourselves—it's the fight for progress. The faith of an idea can lead to war. Just like the battle within the self: it's never-ending. Clever Idea.

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 8:59:00 AM

    you got mail too (:

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 8:20:00 AM

    aww thanks for all ur comments. and is boo ur friend? and yup i know i have to open my eyes. theres a soulmate for everybody. (:

  1. Date: 6/30/2009 6:57:00 AM

    Powerful Lines Friend! Good luck in the Contest!