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Remission (In Memory of William Watt).

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Remission (In Memory of William Watt).

Birth begins the tragedy in us. Life's
First sound is a blank scream
Against sorrow's hidden portends of strifes
All we know are mirages and dream.

Mother took the news staring at the sky
She must have cried inside
For I have no evidence else. There's no why
For it ... how my rage defied
Her callous front ... he was her first boy
The only hero she spoke well
Of, his name was the formula for joy
In our house: anecdotes tell
Of his escapades ... youth defying fate
He had a cat's tenacity for life
And from evil wills found a golden gate
Of scholarship and exotic wife.


I remember when the years pulled him back
All he came with was a bag
Of books, and a couple suits in novel sack
His eyes time warped, a lag
Of missing years and loneliness enfolding him
But he was handsome still
And my soul cartwheeled at joy's fresh brim
Those moments that he filled
When eyes first contact spelled pride to claim
This aristocrat like a medal
I could wear. So young he was, her true flame
The son of love's sweet recital!

And many days sitting in his shadow, I heard
Him dream big things like stars
Far away, warm things like a fluttering bird
Things made bright to cover scars
In the sore of memory. His mind was his cliff
A risky place in the high winds
And closer to the edge for the Grail he'd drift
O how the giddy world spins!
He died in Kingston: William came and went
And my mother looked at the sky
But until she died, about his memory was silent
And I forever wonder why.

I loved him, you know, he was the first best thing
A poor child had to claim or show
The world ... with him I was no more common. A king
He made me in his gold of glow
Something that I looked forward to meet in me. I,
Like mother, been silence since
But sometimes my heart just heave and would cry
For time this love cannot rinse
And I that moment cannot comprehend, that death
Gave no notice to his lauded day
And like common dust on a wild wind's balmy breath
My brother was swiftly swept away.

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  1. Date: 8/17/2009 4:49:00 AM
    Awesome. I can't breath. An amazing write. I'm sorry for your loss... I know the 'swiftly swept away.' Thank you for sharing this. I hope when you write it helps you to heal. It helps me. I'm so glad you're here in the soup with all of us. Thank you for your comments. Peace be with you. Tamra

  1. Date: 7/20/2009 5:38:00 PM
    speechless, this is unreal quality, this might be why you have not been on soup for 3-wks....jim

  1. Date: 7/16/2009 2:15:00 PM
    magnificent. If I could grovel in print I would. Light & Love

  1. Date: 7/14/2009 7:25:00 PM
    Beautifully written with poise and honor. You are a lovely writter and can write my elegy anytime....well,,,,,hopefully not anytime soon. He He He! I appreciate a great artist like yourself....and can rest easy with your inspiring words and wisdom,,,loss is a great burdeon on our mortal souls...but remember always,,, that OUR spirits will long endure our bodies' pains...and our lives will never really END~ You are blessed my friend. God bless ya....Always a friend at the shhhoupie! janers

  1. Date: 6/29/2009 12:05:00 PM
    Oh the love of a mother and love of a sister. Sorry about your loss both of mother and brother. I have lost 6 brothers and since I was adopted lost 2 mothers and 2 fathers. I like your poem. I know that you put a great deal of thought and time into this one writing. Sara

  1. Date: 6/29/2009 10:43:00 AM
    You really poured your heart to the page with this powerful, loving write L'nass. Emotinal and so full of your big heart. Great work!

  1. Date: 6/25/2009 3:04:00 PM
    Wow! Powerful and heartfelt poem--definitely worth more than one read. Keep up the good writing. Karen

  1. Date: 6/25/2009 1:17:00 PM
    Such a beautiful and eloquent tribute... you have done an amazing job here. Every image is simply remarkable =]

  1. Date: 6/21/2009 5:53:00 PM
    L'nass,..I'm speachless,...I know this love,...wonderful and loving write !!!! james

  1. Date: 6/18/2009 9:43:00 AM
    Captivatingly beautiful L'nass! Your words from your elegant pen and the pouring of the heart is cleansing.

  1. Date: 6/17/2009 2:11:00 PM
    B E A U T I F U L H E A R T-AWESOME WRITE--CHARMA

  1. Date: 6/17/2009 5:07:00 AM
    This is an amazing love story that rinse my heart of any hatred that I am feeling this morning....powerful words...

  1. Date: 6/16/2009 11:59:00 PM
    Love the pathos in the penultimate line L'nass.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments