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Blankness

I fared under the caricature
Of desolate bane this eve –
Walking with shiver in pocket
Toward the glassiness of now –

As I reached the tip of today
Drenched I was, in disgust –
Saturated with concocted sweat
I gripped tirelessly, the shiver –

Poured the shock of yesterday
Through forgotten cloud –
As I quivered under the dry
Of pouring dry rains –

My eyes swelled silently shut
From the lack of tears this eve –
My shiver, it completely melted
From the glassiness of now –


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  1. Date: 4/6/2011 11:01:00 AM

    It has been a pleasure to read your excellent poetry today Deborah. I hope to get back soon to read more though you took most of them away. May you always find inspiration to carry on with your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 1/7/2010 5:41:00 PM

    This is very very beautiful, ty WS

  1. Date: 5/29/2009 2:09:00 PM

    Congrats!

  1. Date: 5/26/2009 3:32:00 AM

    Congratulations on your two poems being featured this week Deb. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 5/25/2009 2:12:00 PM

    Double feature this week? congrats again. God Bless. Vince

  1. Date: 5/25/2009 2:09:00 AM

    Very beautiful piece. I enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on your featured poem. Ernilando

  1. Date: 5/24/2009 4:33:00 PM

    Wonderful use of imagery to convey your thoughts in a creative way. Just wanted to drop by and add congratulations on having your poem featured to my other comment. Keep on writing! Karen

  1. Date: 5/18/2009 1:03:00 AM

    Excellent work Deborah.. congrats..!

  1. Date: 5/7/2009 10:14:00 AM

    congrats, deborah!

  1. Date: 5/5/2009 12:50:00 PM

    Errie, desolate and powerful. Imagery superb. Well worth the win you received for this excellent piece. Great job.

  1. Date: 4/18/2009 7:24:00 AM

    Unique and beautiful.

  1. Date: 3/31/2009 3:00:00 AM

    Cleverly written,a deserved winner, well done!!

  1. Date: 3/30/2009 10:46:00 PM

    Hearty congrats dear

  1. Date: 2/2/2009 2:12:00 PM

    So very much to ponder, so much pain, and I think I hear acceptance?"Walking with shiver in pocket, Toward the glassiness of now" wonderful fresh seeing. Light & Love Debbie

  1. Date: 1/17/2009 10:27:00 PM

    wooooooooow that was good. congrats!

  1. Date: 1/13/2009 8:24:00 AM

    Congratulations Deborah, on your first place win. You have masterfully conveyed with words, emotional pain of such intensity, it numbs the soul and freezes the tears inside leaving the soul unable to cry it out. WELL DONE! Lainie

  1. Date: 1/12/2009 12:42:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win, Nice poem...Tyesha

  1. Date: 1/11/2009 5:32:00 AM

    Congratulations Deborah, on your well-deserved win! An emotive piece that reaches out with its descriptive imagery. Hoping you'll have a wonderful 2009, with many smiles. This is a good start!:) Blessing to you and yours..Mikki

  1. Date: 1/10/2009 12:24:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win! I made the semi finals with Urban Lover. If you want to send me a comment or two.

  1. Date: 1/10/2009 8:17:00 AM

    Beautiful, Original and moving!!

  1. Date: 1/9/2009 6:41:00 PM

    Congratulations for your win. Great poem!

  1. Date: 1/9/2009 4:26:00 PM

    CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win. Have a wonderful new year. All best, Orma

  1. Date: 1/8/2009 7:22:00 AM

    Congratulations Deborah on your win. It was well deserved. A beautiful piece!!! I loved the use of language and how intense the poem was...at least I thought it was. All the best for 2009. Keep doing what you're doing!! :-)

  1. Date: 1/7/2009 4:24:00 PM

    Congratulations on your first place finish! That is quite an accomplishment. Nice use of imagery. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

  1. Date: 1/7/2009 1:23:00 PM

    Warmest congratulations on winning the the contest. Have a wonderful new year. Regards Heidie

  1. Date: 1/7/2009 8:36:00 AM

    congrats on the win, a well deserved win, just a suggestion, the (I's), a reader can grasp that it's first person after the initial one, anything further becomes what is known as a filler and actually prohibits the writer of obtaining that clarity to put them over the top of others...Yes many will say "the greats" used it (I) throughout, emphatically, but many in the literary field are realizing the great weren't all that great......awesome poem either way

  1. Date: 1/6/2009 9:06:00 AM

    A Superb introspective poem. Congrats. -ED-

  1. Date: 1/6/2009 2:25:00 AM

    Congratulations maam deborah. wat an introspection in here. i love the word play being incorporated in here. very well deserved win! much respect and adoration, GiNo

  1. Date: 1/5/2009 6:39:00 PM

    Congratulations Deborah on winning the September contest. God Bless.. Vince

  1. Date: 1/5/2009 2:47:00 PM

    Congratulations on your win in the Poetry Soup contest - well deserved :) Christopher

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