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You left me with questions needing answers, but you left behind: tears for every embrace, pain in place of every kiss, and heartache for every longing. You were the sweet air that gave me breath I lived so that I could give you pleasure. My treasures, I gave without measure. I anointed you with passion. Satiating you: my creed. My love was not enough. You sacrificed all, heard her sweet call, gave HER love, and left Me. Eileen Manassian Inspired by Silent One's Contest Theme 2: Its always those you love the most that will hurt you the most

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Paul Callus

Date: 10/12/2015 5:55:00 PM

Giving our all is not always enough. Maybe the temptation of a new 'adventure' drives a person into another's arms, while not realizing (or admitting) the pain that it's causing. I give you top rating for this Etheree, Eileen, irrespective of the contest result! Hugs // paul

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/10/2015 4:10:00 AM

Amazing poem, Eileen. " I anointed you with passion. Satiating you: my creed." Love those lines. The pain in that capitalized "her"...ouch... Always, Laura

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/15/2015 1:06:00 PM

Hi Laura, I'm sorry I haven't been around much. I've been on a trip. Will try to catch up as soon as I can, dear. Hugs

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/5/2015 5:08:00 AM

What a beauty of a writing and of a design this is, dear Eileen! Marvelous work!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:15:00 PM

Thank you, my dear poet. I'm glad that you found this to your liking. I've had a long and tiresome day. It is good to read your greetings. Hugs

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/5/2015 1:24:00 AM

This is the kind of emotion and poetry that makes a man just want to grab the mane of the woman he loves, who is hurt and tearing, pronouncing his heart's truth into her warm ear, and then ravaging her with reckless passion Eileen...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:14:00 PM

Ravage with reckless passion...This is the beauty and charm of your dominion over words, Justin. The passion is raw....the words are bold...the sentiments are steamy. Signature you, my dear. Oh that all men had that kind of zest for love...Hugs, dear.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/4/2015 4:20:00 PM

Good one, but where is this one about a school marm!!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:12:00 PM

That's what I thought you'd write one, dear. Hugs

Tim Smith

Date: 10/4/2015 2:56:00 PM

Very heart wrenching Eileen I knows this all to well.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:11:00 PM

Thanks, Tim. I appreciate the visit, dear. Hugs

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/4/2015 11:18:00 AM

Eileen, this is heart breaking . I connected with your pen instantly. Because I have experienced it. You expressed your thoughts really well:-) Alexis 7

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:11:00 PM

I'm glad you could relate to this write, Alexis. I chose this cue of the ones given, but I have entered another one in the contest. Hope you enjoy that one as well, dear. Hugs

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/4/2015 9:47:00 AM

Heartwrenching the feeling of being left alone for another... I love the concept related to the theme dear.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/5/2015 2:10:00 PM

Thank you for visiting my poem, dear. I'm glad you liked it. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/4/2015 8:19:00 AM

Sad and oh so passionate. Consider "You were the sweet air that gave me breath" the tense is off in the current line it should be "Breathed" but that would throw off the sylable count.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/4/2015 8:59:00 AM

Hi, Richard. Thanks ever so much for your thoughtfulness in pointing that out to me. I loved your line and have used it. Thank you. I originally wanted to use this one for the contest, but I have decided to go with the other one..... :) hugs

Michael Tor

Date: 10/4/2015 1:35:00 AM

Eileen this form is so hard to work with. Trying to find the right words but the syllables are wrong or the syllables are right but the words you want are wrong. It is very difficult to do to get everything right but you have done it here my Dear. A winning entry. i tried it but cancelled mine I wasn't happy with it. I had a neighborhood party at our house and had to go shopping didn't have time to rewrite don't know If I should after reading yours. Lol.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/4/2015 2:29:00 AM

Of course you SHOULD. :) I know I can tweak mine a bit more, but I wanted to get it done before the week starts. I get busy with classes. Please give yours another go. Thanks for your kind words here. It gives me the needed boost I need. Hugs

Mark Woods

Date: 10/4/2015 1:32:00 AM

Wow, I read this as a huge gap between you and me, that was the first thing I saw. This is very clever and so full of emotions.

Mark Woods
Date: 10/4/2015 2:36:00 AM

Hopefully you work the centring out.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/4/2015 2:25:00 AM

Thanks, Mark. I changed the shape. Had to do it manually because I don't know how to center still. :( Boo hoo. Thanks for reading. I appreciate it.