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You Gave Me Wings

With your cruelty You turned my heart to stone Then with skillful hands You crafted it with your chisel Chipping away small pieces Sculpting life like wings Providing the illusion of magnificence How the world marveled at your masterpiece Envied my perceived trancendence Yet sadly my heart would never be able to fly!

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Isa Mahrie

Date: 4/26/2015 3:01:00 PM

Hi Richard, skilfully crafted and how you close it the last line a complexion in this poem of love and sadness and close it perfectly in the last line ... Many Thanks having my "Velvet" poem Win in your " Tell Me" Contest

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 4/25/2015 12:29:00 AM

Your imagery is majestic. Your words elegant. Marvellous.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/25/2015 7:22:00 AM

Thankyou Mon Ami.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/24/2015 9:13:00 AM

- Richard, a touching write! - I wish you a wonderful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/24/2015 9:14:00 AM

Thanks Anne Lise.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/23/2015 12:40:00 PM

Irony written perfectly veiled and in the end it is the poet that uses a rubber chisel to effect reaction, thought and revaluation. Well done Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/24/2015 9:16:00 AM

Oops my thanks jumped up to Mary Jo.

Constance La France

Date: 4/23/2015 10:00:00 AM

Richard, you have created a poem beautifully sad, that last line is piercing, well done 7, and I want to thank you so much for my placement in your Tell Me contest with my poem Why God

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/24/2015 9:13:00 AM

My pleasure Constance! I appreciate you entering my contest"

Kp Nunez

Date: 4/23/2015 9:31:00 AM

The speaker seems to come from a state of such pain from loosing his sense of self and finally, transformed by the trappings, the symbolic wings were the very things that imprisoned him. A marvel of a read. A 7. This is really good, Richard. Forces one to look into the darker, and then see the more important aspects of life. Kim :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 9:45:00 AM

I like how you interpreted my words.

Mama Bear

Date: 4/22/2015 5:01:00 PM

Been there, done that, don't want to do it again. Thanks for the reminder. Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 8:29:00 AM

Have a good trip mom, love ya.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/22/2015 4:47:00 PM

To be given wings like a bird, yet live in a cage and unable to use them is worse than being born without wings in the first place. Profound indeed, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 8:30:00 AM

Thanks for thoughtfully considering my words.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/22/2015 4:08:00 PM

Nicely done Richard. On my poem Accidental Sea. I prefer# 2 as well. My 27 yr old daughter changed words in 1 & said hers was better. I said we will see. Thanks for reading it. Have a great day ;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 8:31:00 AM

Ha ha, the arrogance of youth. Thanks for dropping by.

Tim Smith

Date: 4/22/2015 2:01:00 PM

Excellent Richard...even if we are crafted to what is perceived to be perfection we are often broken inside

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 8:35:00 AM

You are kind Tim.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/22/2015 10:52:00 AM

This is lovely, Richard. Beautiful in every way

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2015 8:37:00 AM

Awww you are sweet! Hugs!

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 4/22/2015 10:03:00 AM

This is not the pretty piece that the title would imply. When I first started reading I thought that of he's going to fly away from the situation, but at last, it is still stone which is not buoyant. Really like this one, Richard. ~Jan

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2015 10:09:00 AM

Thanks Jan, I'm pleased you like my piece Jan.

Anna Hopper

Date: 4/22/2015 8:47:00 AM

Excellent write! I tend to have a hard time following poetry that doesn't rhyme consistently. This poem, however, flows of the tongue. It was an intellectual piece that a newbie could appreciate! Thanks for sharing. A 7 from me!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2015 9:12:00 AM

You are kind Anna.