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                          The fishbowl beckons, nightly.
                          Irony, really, since I live in one.
                          Yet      the windows         call,
                          Framed drama, lives displayed.
                          A gray man smokes, endlessly,
                          his      butt  drones         silent         
                          words and from here I can see
                          dread in his wife’s head shake. 
                          A TV,        flickering,       casts
                          shadows of loneliness.  Floors
                          of strangers, faces all familiar,
                          but       indifference        keeps
                          neighbors across dim hallways.
                          The highrise is aging, there are
                          frail       rust lines         on each
                          balcony railing. Even the moon
                          crumbles over time.  In the city
                          days          disappear          like
                          rent checks,  complete privacy
                          and secrets.  A widower works
                          out          as though           he
                          can run through the thick walls.
                          A single mom paces, phone to
                          her          ear and        her son
                          bounces a small, green ball to
                          hide himself.   No one expects
                          the            drunk           on the
                          tenth floor to jump.  They had
                          heard the arguments, but still
                          as we        looked       at truth,
                          and witnessed heart’s fragility,
                          each of us shattered with  his                    body.

                       *Based on a true event. 
                        A man jumped from the tenth floor in the apartment building 
                        across from mine. The event was kept out of the media. 
                        I was later told that his wife had left him that morning. 

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  1. Date: 8/1/2012 6:07:00 AM
    Congratulations on your well deserved win in Craig's "Concrete/Shape" contest Cyndi. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 7/31/2012 11:54:00 PM
    What can I say...Wonderamazincredible poem!! Those tiny windows, through the tragic story you tell in this poem, are extremely meaningful.....and powerful, Cyndi. Congratulations on your deserved win. Ruben.

  1. Date: 7/30/2012 8:35:00 PM
    Cyndi, heart wrenching story and I hate to read that it's true...How awful! You painted the building with so much description, I felt like was right there....Superb write and worthy of it's TOP NOTCH SPOT!!! Bravo for this enticing write filled with energy from beginning to end! Best to you, gwendolen

    Rix Avatar Gwendolen Rix
    Date: 7/30/2012 8:36:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    ps...the analogy to a fish bowl was outstanding! My shape poem was true also...A Package of Smokes...
  1. Date: 7/29/2012 10:30:00 PM

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 5:43:00 PM
    Clever shape and the poem, though, sad, was excellent. Congrats on your win, Cyndi! Love, Kim

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 2:32:00 PM
    Congrats, Cyndi! How awful to be surrounded by people and still feel so lonely. A poignant write and the shape adds to the impact of the words perfectly. Love and Blessings, Rhonda

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:12:00 PM
    Congratulations Cyndi great shape, sad tale xx

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 1:05:00 PM
    Creative work..Congrats ....Sara

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:51:00 PM
    Congratulations Cyndi, on your win with this sad but wonderful write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:26:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win. I like the way the spaces contributes to the poem; not just the spoken word. Poetry Soup might consider adding the option to be able to "justify" our script - it would enhance the presentation. Love, Suzette

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:14:00 PM
    Cyndi congrats on your win, an excellent shape, but very sad..David

  1. Date: 7/29/2012 12:07:00 PM
    Not surprised to find your name next to this--your brilliance precedes you!! See my blog

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 6:51:00 PM
    whoops!a sad slice of life... but to me, music to the ear!... profound on many levels, cyn...the long space between " his" and "body" in the end provides a pause to suspend the finality of the scene... very visual!.., ayy, TPS' settings do not allow me to comment on blogs in a consistent manner.. i like your haiku notes; they give a more contemporary view of this battered ( lol!) form... ohh, our girl has a mind of her own, so charmingly assertive...thanks for the suggestion; i tweaked it a bit for newer perspective... few storms here restrict me from accepting writing projects, facilitating workshops and brewing new communication plans.. ohh, but dance and online counseling, i do for now... stay well,thiamine herbal vitamins are helping me get by... till next!... take this verse to the top!..:) miss ya and huggs!

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 5:51:00 PM
    well written poem. trying to figure out how the wife will feel hearing the sadness that follows her packing out of the man's life. I enjoyed this creative poem this night. WOMEN HOLD MEN WITH CARE,else THE WORLD WILL BE........Tear!

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 4:36:00 PM
    Hello Cyndi, It is a hard task to write about misfortune and follow it through with such dignity. This is written with the utmost passion and creative energy and sadness withstanding I found this to be a very well written poem. As Always, Shar

  1. Date: 7/26/2012 12:01:00 PM