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Whirlpool

Luckless vessel plucked from the surface; sucked into uncharted fathoms. Relentless, roiling vortex consumes all evidence. Sated, exhausted, swirling eddy dissipates. All is calm.

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Paul Callus

Date: 12/16/2017 2:26:00 PM

I see from the comment below that Susan and I more or less share the same views, John! I can add that this whirlpool can be a metaphor in which you are the vessel being sucked in by life's vortex. ~ Regards // paul

John Michaels
Date: 1/12/2018 5:00:00 AM

Thanks for your kind and supportive comments, Paul. Kind regards, John.

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/1/2017 7:54:00 PM

An excellent nonet John. I can hear the water swirling and see its spinning centered depression pulling everything down into itself. Your third line is descriptively powerful, I just love the use of the word 'roiling' it's just such a great verb! Your last four lines ends your poem in a vivid contrast to your top lines which is awesome.. A vibrant and potent write that I enjoyed! A great first write too!! :)

John Michaels
Date: 1/12/2018 4:59:00 AM

Thanks so much, Susan. This was from when I first starting getting into poetry, so am delighted it still holds up!! Kind regards, John.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/28/2014 6:15:00 AM

Interesting and creative. Congrats on your poem being featured this week,

John Michaels
Date: 5/28/2014 12:27:00 PM

Thanks for the positive comments... glad you enjoyed it!

Diane Christian

Date: 5/27/2014 7:35:00 AM

congratulations on your featured poem wonderful

John Michaels
Date: 5/27/2014 4:04:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words... I hope you enjoyed it!

Taylor Parsons

Date: 5/27/2014 6:43:00 AM

Death, or just a tornado?

John Michaels
Date: 5/27/2014 4:10:00 PM

Ooh, that's quite deep. It could certainly be interpreted that way... thank you for stopping by!!

Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 5/26/2014 9:08:00 PM

Hello John...That was well done and I especially like how you displayed the poem in a whirl effect....Very ingenious :) Ana

John Michaels
Date: 5/27/2014 4:11:00 PM

Thank you very much for your comments... I'm pleased that you liked it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/23/2014 8:31:00 PM

thought I would view your very first one. Very nice and descriptive this one is. I love how you ended it. A bog welcome to the Soup.

John Michaels
Date: 5/24/2014 4:24:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comments on this poem (and my other ones)... did you mean "big" rather than "bog"? :)

Faye Gibson

Date: 5/16/2014 4:24:00 PM

Welcome to Poetry Soup, John. Hope you find much support here as you get acquainted. Comment on others poetry and they will return the favor. Best wishes.

John Michaels
Date: 5/24/2014 4:32:00 AM

Thank you for your message of welcome. I have been taking you advice on board and enjoying other poets' work...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/16/2014 8:35:00 AM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, John :) - I choose your first very well written nonet poem - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

John Michaels
Date: 5/24/2014 4:40:00 AM

Hi Anne-Lise... thanks for stopping by and for your comments. Am seeking out other poems and leaving comments of my own, which seems to be working as you say! Cheers!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/15/2014 10:26:00 AM

Hi John,, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

John Michaels
Date: 5/16/2014 4:52:00 AM

Thanks for the warm welcome. Will be sure to check out the competition pages...

Skat A

Date: 5/15/2014 8:59:00 AM

JOHN, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

John Michaels
Date: 5/16/2014 4:53:00 AM

Thanks for your comments... hope to post some more poems soon and look forward to feedback from the community.