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Where Did We Go Wrong

you flow so aesthetic Sea Wolf may be we dont know each others names playing tricks on punks, all just games undulate my waves and shoot down my dreams to the flames ive been in this too long man all those skeleton keys remaining up your sleeves leaving many in deceit only cause grief, never relief, just tenacious belief its was phony from the get-go man im an average citizen im an average citizen now the walls are steel, concrete-plastered ruins remember when people like me cheered for the Bruins?

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Date: 5/13/2016 11:39:00 PM
the doo, Fantastic writing, glad to read your poem tonight. Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/12/2016 9:00:00 AM
the dood, was wondering if you ever going ta pOSt again. skat
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Date: 5/3/2016 5:45:00 PM
Interesting take on a familiar subject. I liked the skeleton keys up the sleeves. Have you considered shifting the second and third stanzas? I think tenacious belief is a strong line for the last stanza. Welcome to Soup!
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Date: 4/26/2016 8:56:00 AM
The Dood, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 4/26/2016 8:09:00 AM
That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Dood. :)
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Date: 4/26/2016 5:21:00 AM
The Dood,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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