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When I Close My Eyes

Night Whispers in my ear, promising sweet Dreams from another world. My eyes lidded With wonder of images that aren't complete. My consciousness blurs, I scrunch up my feet. Dream realm returns, I enter it timid. Night whispers in my ear, promising. Sweet Melodies drift down a rain ridden street. Colors explode to make the dull gilded. I wonder of images that aren't complete. I dream in color that's full of deceit, My journey confused but benefited Night. Whispers in my ear, promising sweet Souls of good fortune. The spell obsolete, Slips off my mind. The day then comes guilted, I linger with images that aren't complete. Startling gold sun begins to reach its peak, But my mind is in bed, dreaming tinted. Night whispers in my ear, promising sweet Wonder of images that now are complete.

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Date: 11/2/2014 6:41:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Jordyn - I choose your first written villanelle poem - I like it a lot, beautiful !! - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/29/2014 6:03:00 AM
I can definitely agree with Gary...This is beautifully painted!!!
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Date: 10/28/2014 7:05:00 PM
Jordyn, I enjoyed your Villanelle here immensely. The tone, pitch, tenor, and imagery are all quite wonderful. Most Excellent in every respect. And a most deserved "7" from me. This one is a FAV for me too!! Cheers and Spill Ink!! Gary
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Jordyn Linkenback
Date: 10/28/2014 7:08:00 PM
Thank you so much!

Book: Shattered Sighs