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What Lurks Within

Its dark in here, there’s a scuttling noise, there is something I see The dinosaur of the modern age, silverfish are crawling free. There is a dripping sound; I smell an old wet rag In fact the smell is awful, it even makes me gag. I am keeping very still; there is a light in the big room I see through this crack, even though I am in the gloom. I turn around slowly; I wish I’d stayed outside But the smell of food enticed me, then I find I could have died. Sitting on the wire, a huge chunk of moldy cheese But still in did entice me, my hunger it may appease. It was the memory of my little wife that stopped me just in time When she stepped onto that trap she thought it was a meal sublime. But I remembered just in time, and now I turn my back I am waiting for the light to go, then I will start to back track. No more in this cupboard, will I lurk within I may find a better mouse dinner, going through the rubbish bin… © 22/03/2013 ~GG~

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Date: 4/8/2013 5:33:00 PM
THis is SO cute , Mandy. Glad to finally see it. I like the light way you took the challenge and made this adorable mouse tale!!
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Date: 4/8/2013 10:53:00 AM
excellent winner Mandy, and truly deserved...
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Date: 4/8/2013 9:37:00 AM
Indeed a Golden Poem...thanks...
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Date: 4/8/2013 8:06:00 AM
This is indeed a great write my dearest friend Mandy! My hearty congratulations on your super win and amazing write! Have a great weekend! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:42:00 PM
Enjoyed your mouse tale! Congratulations! RAY
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:36:00 PM
So cute little mouse, I hate them so. They steal the stuffing out of pillows and quilts, invade drawers. And smell. But, I had a pet one once. J
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Date: 4/7/2013 7:00:00 PM
congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/7/2013 6:11:00 PM
Mandy~ Congratulations in Seren's "what lurks within" contest. Always~ LINDA
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Date: 4/7/2013 5:46:00 PM
Delightful! Congratulations.
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Date: 4/7/2013 5:19:00 PM
well done Mandy, like the punch line ...Seren
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Date: 3/24/2013 5:44:00 PM
again wonderful story telling, one lucky little mouse, living there,,,
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Date: 3/23/2013 5:36:00 AM
You are a great story teller!!! Loved it... and thank you for your sweet blog comment to me...xxxx Michael
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Date: 3/22/2013 10:04:00 PM
Thanks, I enjoyed...Good luck in the contest.....
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Date: 3/22/2013 9:41:00 AM
WOW! Good one, Mandy! Dad once caught a little mouse that was so adorable...I made him take it out to the wooded area and set it free! This was a fantastic tail!!! ;)
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Date: 3/22/2013 7:28:00 AM
A mousy tail. Nice.
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Date: 3/22/2013 9:11:00 AM
Thanks Michael xx
Date: 3/22/2013 7:11:00 AM
Wow Mandy...I was all set for a horror story....great job...Donna.
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Date: 3/22/2013 9:11:00 AM
Thanks again Donna xx
Date: 3/22/2013 5:31:00 AM
I had no idea this was about a little mouse until the sixth stanza, so very nicely written my friend! I really enjoyed reading this cleverly written poem this morning! What a delightful piece, wondrously put together Mandy! Great Work!!
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Date: 3/22/2013 5:35:00 AM
Good, I kept it secret until then , thanks Russell xx

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