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What a Clot Am I

What A Clot Am I I sit there just waiting, waiting my turn to move You’ll never know where I’ll strike; I am on a mission, myself to prove No one knows where I’ll strike, but Doppler* tries to find me Especially if I decide to have a trip to your retina, so you can’t see I can put a stop to you by moving, when I desire to do so. My favorite trip is a twisting ride, then stop and deliver my blow When I decide to stop it doesn’t matter if in youth or old age Just watch me bowl people down, when I'm on the rampage I travel where I will and I’ll bet you have now reached the conclusion I am that bloody evil clot, known as a vascular occlusion ©~GG~ 3/12/2012 *Doppler (sonography a form of ultrasound) Contest entry: Occlusion

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Date: 3/25/2013 6:24:00 PM
Congrats on your great winning work..Sara
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Date: 12/27/2012 5:15:00 PM
Another lesson learnt, vascular occlusion, love it you clot, lol.
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Date: 12/4/2012 8:13:00 AM
Mandy, your poem is just amazing, well done and best of luck in the contest. Constance
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Date: 12/4/2012 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Constance, I really appreciate that xx
Date: 12/4/2012 8:08:00 AM
It's a pretty scary thing. Things that come so unexpectedly are the worst. VERY creative use of the word occlusion. wish I had thought of it!!!
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Date: 12/4/2012 8:31:00 AM
But you would have to be a clot to think of it and you are no clot lol xx
Date: 12/4/2012 5:46:00 AM
Very cleverly you have weaved the warp and weft of this striking writes my friend. Thank you for your good wishes on my PINK PINK PINK Poem. Love and best wishes..Ravindra K ... Mandy Tams
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Date: 12/4/2012 7:42:00 AM
Thanks Ravindra for the time and comment , both much appreciated xx
Date: 12/4/2012 2:15:00 AM
I so agree with Harry. A great job.
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Date: 12/4/2012 7:43:00 AM
Thank You Tahera much appreciated xx
Date: 12/3/2012 3:44:00 PM
is there no bounds to your themes of poetry? Mandy, this is extremely clever poetry, and as jack says Scary too...
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Date: 12/4/2012 7:44:00 AM
Thanks harry, no I don't think there is LOL xx
Date: 12/3/2012 3:16:00 PM
love this clever write on a very scary subject, my friend
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Date: 12/4/2012 7:45:00 AM
Scary but true jack like Terry below I have been visited a few times by the little buggers xx
Date: 12/3/2012 2:22:00 PM
I just had a visit from this same character in the last year in the form of a stroke and 4 TIA strokes. Ain't old age grand. Keep your chin up hun we ain't done yet not until he calls our name. Huggs TLee
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Date: 12/4/2012 7:46:00 AM
Poor you Terry they are a pin my first was when I was 40 and the little buggers keep coming back lol xx

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