Voices

I's walking alone Near down the stream of silence Called my spirit "Ssshhh" calm blow of air Embracing my warm body Uplift my spirit "Ribbit, Ribbit" Oh! The amazing chants of frogs Flattering my heart "Buzzzzz" the busy bees Dancing whilst butts were working Ouch! sweet kiss you shared "Tweet" the lovely birds! Circling around the bright sun What a wonderful! "Tik" ...can't identify There's moving under my feet Alas! pygmy prey! Can't count what I hear Wake up my dear sleeping soul Give one chance to live

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Paul Schneiter

Date: 3/24/2016 11:16:00 PM

Brilliant construction combined with words that give life to sounds make this poem remarkable. Then there is the message-rich concluding stanza: wonderful!

Robin Davis

Date: 9/27/2013 10:35:00 PM

This is a nice write full of imagery and creativity. You take the reader on a nature journey full of life and wonderment. nice job

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/30/2013 11:07:00 AM

This is very beautiful Elai. Well done on your brilliant quill. AO

Elai Cee
Date: 6/1/2013 8:41:00 AM

thanks OA

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/28/2013 12:14:00 PM

I enjoyed your inclusion of sounds here Elai--- so many beautiful sounds from nature if we only stop and listen... very nice. Thanks as well for passing by my poem

Elai Cee
Date: 5/29/2013 1:12:00 AM

thank you... P.Ink

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/26/2013 10:34:00 AM

Beautiful picture worded in to sweet haiku. It's called genius presentation. Thanks......,loved always, bl

Elai Cee
Date: 5/26/2013 12:30:00 PM

thank u BL

John Posey

Date: 5/26/2013 9:11:00 AM

Having written a few haiku poems, I can appreciate what you have accomplished here. You have forged this form into the smoothest haiku I have seen in a long while. Great job.... Jake

Elai Cee
Date: 5/26/2013 9:23:00 AM

thaks dear John... i make all ur comments as an inspiration to enhance more my writings. God bless u!

Claiborne Randle

Date: 5/21/2013 2:50:00 PM

lovely

Elai Cee
Date: 5/22/2013 6:52:00 AM

thanks Claiborne

Joe Maverick

Date: 5/20/2013 10:55:00 PM

Enyoyed reading your Haiku venture here Elai I see Lots of potential in your work hope to see more of your stuff..'

Elai Cee
Date: 5/22/2013 6:49:00 AM

Thanks Joe... this can really help to see ur comment

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/20/2013 12:53:00 PM

The tone of this piece floats in a charming way!.. winner... :) huggs

Elai Cee
Date: 5/22/2013 6:48:00 AM

Thanks net... u'r wonderful..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/20/2013 8:44:00 AM

Hi Elai, reformation of the soul. I like it!!! I like the first haiku. the imagery of walking alone, in silence,,, then that's when all the voices start.... good with the tik, tweet, and buzzing sound... enjoyed~ Linda

Elai Cee
Date: 5/22/2013 6:48:00 AM

Miss u Linda... thank you, you are truly awesome in my heart...

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/20/2013 8:24:00 AM

The inner whispers longing for your voice. Incredible.

Elai Cee
Date: 5/22/2013 6:50:00 AM

thanks Drake

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/20/2013 7:52:00 AM

Divine whispers to an awaiting for enlightenment soul!

Elai Cee
Date: 5/20/2013 7:57:00 AM

thank you for visiting me here... flattered by your comment.

Rev. Dr. Samuel Mack Oms Dd

Date: 5/20/2013 5:50:00 AM

Very Very wonderful Here is the point of God speaking through you as David said in Psalms "I lift up my soul to you Lord" this is a very very wonderful wording for todays poeple God bless and keep writing

Elai Cee
Date: 5/20/2013 7:16:00 AM

Thanks Samuel. I know He made it all for us. I read the book of psalms and i have seen how beautiful and good is God! miss your comment.

Elai Cee

Date: 5/20/2013 2:50:00 AM

I decided to enter this in SOUND's competition under by Frank H.---so excited whether i will win or not. It's an honor to be part of it! high kick!!!---ELAI